It's always fun to see the occasional goodfic analysis.
The One Stop Plot Shop is interesting. Are they a group within the PPC, or a separate element of the Canon Protection Initiative? Anyway, I liked the Interpretation, and how it seems each character interprets the thing itself as something different. It's a fun way to show something about who they are.
Now, I've dug through my old badfic bookmarks, and I've found one I think you might like:
Fic: "Bella in Black"
Continua: Men in Black x Twilight
Description: Bella is a member of the MiB for some reason. They deal with vampires now. J leaves because reasons; Jacob Black takes his place as "the new J." They're sent to Forks to investigate the Cullens, or maybe protect them, or something. Naturally, Bella falls for Edward and blah blah blah.
Type of Badfic: Crossover
Plot Holes/Offenses Against Canon: The writing is wooden and soulless with plenty of typos, and the chapters are generally underdeveloped—the shortest, Chapter 8, is just four lines long and it's recapped in the following chapter, making it redundant to boot.
Bella and Edward manage to be even more annoying than they are in canon. They fall in love instantly, with absolutely zero interaction. Bella in particular gets away with openly flaunting the rules of the MiB, culminating in this little gem of a scene in Chapter 12:
I slipped my glasses on my head so I could look him in the eye, "What are you going to do, Boss?" I asked, "You going to fire me? Kill me? Take me off the case? You're not going to do anything. You know just as well as I do that you can't do anything. I'm the best agent you have. You can't risk loosing me."
He stared at me and then he started to smile, "I was wondering how long it would take," he said.
"Till what?" I asked.
"Until you broke the last rule," he said, "Telling off the boss. You're more than ready for this, Swan." Then he was gone.
Everyone was quiet for a second and then I ran after him. "Boss!" I yelled. He looked at me, "How are you okay with me breaking the rules? You tell me not to break rules, and then you call me by my real name, tell me that breaking rules is okay, and walk out!"
"You are the best agent, Bella," he said, "I've waiting for you to finally stand up to me like that. You are ready. Now go back to your boyfriend." He laughed and got in his car.
Besides being stupid, I feel like it's ripping something off, too, but I can't think what. {= /
Then there's the horrible "fight scene," if you can call it that, in Chapter 14. The story proceeds to ruin Twilight canon by having Bella turn into a vampire after being bitten by James, And They All Settle Down And Live Happily Ever After. *vomits*
Oh, and a minor plothole which is nevertheless annoying: the story makes a big deal over Edward not knowing Bella's real name, but in POV sections other than Bella's, the narrative uses her name before the characters learn it. Just sloppy.
It's a little over 6,000 words, but there's enough pointless drivel that I think it might slide? Plus, it's MiB, and we need more MiB missions.
~Neshomeh
