Subject: Actually I read the first chapter.
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Posted on: 2016-01-30 19:53:00 UTC
-Timeline. When the duck is this supposed to happen? If it's following canon up to the moment it was published, problems. (Besides, he saw more beautiful women. Butcher know how to use good purple prose.)
-Dresden could like eye candies when he sees them, but he learned to keep his libido in check. There are monsters who could kill you, or worst, by sex, for Butcher's sake!
-Letting the unknown person enter his appartment without letting her cross the threshold on her own? Suicidal stupidity.
-Idem with moving his office to his appartment. Professional activities destroy a threshold. Threshold is the most magic protection ever. There is ducking reason he was renting an office!
-A lift? He's living in a basement!
-Sweetheart, Time meddling is forbidden by the Sixth Law of Magic, and all offenses about them mean death, and destruction of the culprit's mind because of black magic. Forget. It.
-Talking about Bob like this? I don't even... He would not even mention it like this. With excellent reasons.
If the question was, "Is this missionable?", Dresden Files part of the deal is pretty much settled.