Subject: Generally I agree...
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Posted on: 2016-01-22 10:30:00 UTC
But knowing who Gabrielle and Dok are isn't integral to the understanding of the story — it's kinda like a shout-out. (Reminds me of July's intertexuality challenge. Maybe it should be revived?)
It's another short one, but I hope you guys enjoy!
...and before anyone says anything, I'm going to go ahead and promise this will be the last piece that deals with any heavy stuff for a while. Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye.
And in other news, tomorrow is my two-year PPCversary, but who's counting? :3
Without further ado...
The Aviator and Zeb go Return to WhatThe.
How could anyone think that this was in any way a coherent story, much less a good one?
Two questions:
1) Wasn't there a second Sue (James ridian scarlet)? Or did you figure that he's so small a bit that he disappeared with the rest of the fic?
2) I’m going to have a story to tell Gabrielle and Dok when I get back,” Zeb mused.
Who are Gabrielle and Dok?
Written by Scape and Ix, as a quick look in the wiki would have told you.
... you shouldn't have to look at an external reference guide to understand a story. ;)
(Though, equally, 'someone namedrops their friends' doesn't actually require a full explanation, any more than 'these swords were made in Gondolin' did...)
hS
But knowing who Gabrielle and Dok are isn't integral to the understanding of the story — it's kinda like a shout-out. (Reminds me of July's intertexuality challenge. Maybe it should be revived?)
I've found it's best to just not question the insanity. >.>
1) I honestly couldn't tell if this was supposed to be James Sirius and the story was getting him confused for the Sue or if he was a separate character. Doesn't really matter, though, since he got eaten by the collapsing fic.
2) Pokémon agents in the Department of WhatThe. Gabby's mine, Doktor Trollenfisch is Scape's. We've only done two things with them, so I'm not surprised you didn't know.
I'll actually read that, then. ^_~
I would comment that you didn't really give me a feel for what was going on, but I think the agents didn't have a feel for what was going on, so... well done? I think?
Entirely random comments:
-'Thank the Legendaries!'. Am I the only one who momentarily figured Zeb had started worshipping Legendary Badfics there? (... I'm picturing a pantheon that includes Celebrian, Rose Potter, Jenna, and Laura... aaaaaand now I'm reaching for the brain bleach...)
-'Why didn't WhatThe get this fic?'. Was there any reason they should? WhatThe gets fics where the main problem is so out there that Intelligence wouldn't even know where to send it. See: 'the Lust Object is literally God', 'the Hobbits speak in Gaelic', 'it's a Suefic starring the Black Knight what the...?!'. This was... a badly-written story which has all the hallmarks of 'me and my friends go to Hogwarts' (unless all those people are canon characters?). This is my fault; I never really did clearly define what WhatThe do.
hS
Who had to take some time to figure that Zeb meant Legendary Pokemon and not Legendary Badfic.
Praise the Legendaries! Give thanks to Celebrian for the Blessing of Smut; glorify Rose for the Gift of Power; and bow down before Laura for the Freedom from Grammar!
Look what you two did. :-/
hS
"By the grace of Jenna, your dreams can come true."
hS
Thanks a lot for the mental images. Now I feel strangely compelled to go sacrifice a bottle of glitterglue on the Altar of Sues and prance around naked...
Well, since the entire fic was nothing but sheer "WTF is going on in this story?!", I figured it was just as good a candidate that could have gone to DWT as any.
And holy Whoever, that was weird. I think that's the first Sue we've seen that accidentally caused inflation of a canon economy.
Also, I know this isn't too relevant, but on a computer screen, everything from ""Each of them have at least 100 million galleons." I heard Uncle Bill mummer appreciatively."" onwards, except for "Liliana nymphedora tonks melody rose julian right ridian- scarlet, also known as Liliana Nymphadora Tonks Melody Rose Ridian Scarlet, also known as [Mary Sue]", looks gray. Is it just the screen I'm using or did something actually go wrong on your end?
I would definitely support Zeb in his efforts to find/make Poffins with Bleeprin in them. :P
It looks fine on mine.
And eh, I've seen other fics that break the Potterverse economy. Usually ones where Harry becomes Lord Potter and inherits a bunch of money. :/
Hmm. Bloffins? Bleepoffins? POFFEEPS? wait, no, that last one sounds like a Pokémon
Underneath all the 'lolz teh random' humour, horrid English, and indescribable insanity, there might be an actual comedian and writer here.
Though, I imagine you could say that about most suethors.
Now the ... Words here were serious nonsense (No, I'm not gracing that with the term story.).
Hope Ave will really go better. At least, there's no alcohol to be seen around...
P.S.: I'll also go for a happy Boardday.