Words fail me by
son_of_heaven176
on 2016-01-22 00:46:00 UTC
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How could anyone think that this was in any way a coherent story, much less a good one?
Two questions:
1) Wasn't there a second Sue (James ridian scarlet)? Or did you figure that he's so small a bit that he disappeared with the rest of the fic?
2) I’m going to have a story to tell Gabrielle and Dok when I get back,” Zeb mused.
Who are Gabrielle and Dok?
Oh, hey, it's short! by
Huinesoron
on 2016-01-21 16:15:00 UTC
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I'll actually read that, then. ^_~
I would comment that you didn't really give me a feel for what was going on, but I think the agents didn't have a feel for what was going on, so... well done? I think?
Entirely random comments:
-'Thank the Legendaries!'. Am I the only one who momentarily figured Zeb had started worshipping Legendary Badfics there? (... I'm picturing a pantheon that includes Celebrian, Rose Potter, Jenna, and Laura... aaaaaand now I'm reaching for the brain bleach...)
-'Why didn't WhatThe get this fic?'. Was there any reason they should? WhatThe gets fics where the main problem is so out there that Intelligence wouldn't even know where to send it. See: 'the Lust Object is literally God', 'the Hobbits speak in Gaelic', 'it's a Suefic starring the Black Knight what the...?!'. This was... a badly-written story which has all the hallmarks of 'me and my friends go to Hogwarts' (unless all those people are canon characters?). This is my fault; I never really did clearly define what WhatThe do.
hS
Yaaay! *bells* by
eatpraylove
on 2016-01-21 13:32:00 UTC
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And holy Whoever, that was weird. I think that's the first Sue we've seen that accidentally caused inflation of a canon economy.
Also, I know this isn't too relevant, but on a computer screen, everything from ""Each of them have at least 100 million galleons." I heard Uncle Bill mummer appreciatively."" onwards, except for "Liliana nymphedora tonks melody rose julian right ridian- scarlet, also known as Liliana Nymphadora Tonks Melody Rose Ridian Scarlet, also known as [Mary Sue]", looks gray. Is it just the screen I'm using or did something actually go wrong on your end?
I would definitely support Zeb in his efforts to find/make Poffins with Bleeprin in them. :P
Potential by
Larfen J. Stocke, esq
on 2016-01-21 07:50:00 UTC
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Underneath all the 'lolz teh random' humour, horrid English, and indescribable insanity, there might be an actual comedian and writer here.
Though, I imagine you could say that about most suethors.
Pretty sure you'll break last year record at this rate. by
Hardric
on 2016-01-20 16:45:00 UTC
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Now the ... Words here were serious nonsense (No, I'm not gracing that with the term story.).
Hope Ave will really go better. At least, there's no alcohol to be seen around...
P.S.: I'll also go for a happy Boardday.