Subject: Short and sweet
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Posted on: 2016-01-09 02:38:00 UTC

I wonder if what's-her-name (drat! Forgot already!) will mellow out once she sees the craziness that is PPC technology, or whether she ends up being the only friend of a certain female Time Lord.

Either way, good inerlude.

A few errors:

1) Alex’s cheer was abruptly cut off. “Waitwhat.”
I know that you're trying to convey that Alex said those words in rapid succession, but I don't think that the sense of "WTF?" would be lost by punctuating:
"Wait, what?"

2) “Right then, um, Farilan, if you’d follow me please.”
Missing comma before "please".

3) The doors to Hornbeam’s office were easily at least sixty feet tall, but there was a smaller door set into the left hand, larger door
Hyphenate "left hand".

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