Good chapter, as usual. It may be a wait between chapters, but they are always worth it.

However, a few errors slipped through.

1) There weren’t many people, though — at a quick glance, even if everyone was sitting at the same time more than half of the tables would remain empty.

That em dash should be a colon. Also, please consider adding a few words and a comma in order to make the sentence's meaning clearer:
"There weren’t many people, though: at a quick glance, it appeared that even if everyone were sitting at the same time, more than half of the tables would remain empty."


2) “I know, and I’m not going to drink either, alcohol now would be a terrible idea. Just pretend to take a sip from time to time, it will make our cover more believable.”

The last two commas should both be semicolons.


3) “I’m in too.” she sent out as she hid behind one of the crates to avoid being spotted by a couple of Defectives.

You need a comma before "too".


4) [We have another problem!] Corolla shouted, opening a holographic window in front of them, [Homura tried to stop Vera, but she’s not responding anymore!]

That comma after "in front of them" should be a period.


5) [Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder,] Corolla completed from Nikki’s Device. [I was starting to suspect that, with how you were acting in the last days.]

Consider rewording it a bit: "with how you were acting over the last few days".

Well, retirement of Sergio and Nikki was always a given, between the Blackout and the TYH stories about their daughter you wrote.

On another note, final stage is built, as per Drama Queenie's standards. Only thing left is making sure it's the defeat is as crushing as possible... Or as much as an anticlimax as possible to deprive her of this. And she better pray that Homura never find a way to get payback on her.

Oh, and we need pictures of Sakura and Madoka playing House of the Dea, or any other zombie shooter in existence. XD

I've probably said this before, but I absolutely love that you're basing this series on an old fic of yours. Even though we aren't familiar with Agent Turbo's original story, it still gives an interesting sense of history and complexity to his character, that most agents don't tend to have. I love it! I also love the contrast it provides between Turbo having reformed from his days in the old fic, and Vera remaining true to her motivations in the original story, recast through the lens of a Suvian. It's sort of like a narrative representation of your development as a writer over the years!

I also see that the thing I've been dreading isn't as bad as I thought. I was worried you were killing off your agents (sans Corolla) to account for them being missing during the future part of the Blackout, but it looks like they're just retiring instead. Guess I should have assumed the simplest explanation!

—doctorlit gushes fanboy all over the Board