Subject: I like it! Looking forward to more :) (nm)
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Posted on: 2016-10-01 12:50:00 UTC
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Well, I've finally done it. by
on 2016-09-30 23:40:00 UTC
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So 2 years, 10 months and 11 days after I gained permission I have finally got around to writing something PPC-canon related involving my Agents Apollo and Kelly. Unfortunately if you want a mission, I have a feeling you'll have to wait past the three year mark before it'll be complete.
In the meantime enjoy Prelude I: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1n4qeVXriakvIKFZmKcXYW-91S-KpKNSTzWZ2xPU1UOE/edit?usp=sharing
Storme Hawk -
Nothing to say that hasnÂ’t already been said... by
on 2016-10-02 16:38:00 UTC
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... except the usual:
Stopping at first door she found ...
Is there a "the" missing?
He had short back hair that seemed to have beaten any attempts to tame it ...
Did you mean "black"?
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Finally got around to doing the changes by
on 2016-10-08 21:09:00 UTC
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Thanks.
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Congrats for beating Schedule Slip™! by
on 2016-10-01 14:13:00 UTC
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I've enjoyed the
interprelude, though it's a bit on the short-ish side; I kinda expected a bit more interaction between Apollo and Kelly. Other than, I don't really have anything to say. -
I like it! Looking forward to more :) (nm) by
on 2016-10-01 12:50:00 UTC
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Consider it enjoyed. by
on 2016-10-01 09:24:00 UTC
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There was a very quiet, subtle sense of humour throughout the whole thing - even the absurdity of Kelly running into the direct opposite of her RC has a certain dry calmness, which I quite like. (I also just like that joke in general)
Hell, even the [BEEEEEEEEP] joke has that quality, what with the punchline being a cynical comment, as opposed to any other number of possibilities. Normally the kind of joke you'd expect to be very loud, y'know?
You've also done a good job of introducing the various characteristics of the agents, from Apollo being in pitch-black and fine with it, to Kelly being delighted at archery equipment. Very showy, without telly, y'know?
As Ix said, of course, some've the dialogue's a bit expositiony.
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Very Cool. by
on 2016-10-01 00:39:00 UTC
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I like the idea of a daughter of Apollo and a Green Arrow expy working together. That was clever.
I'll be on the lookout for more from these two.
Quivering with anticipation, really. -
Boo! by
on 2016-10-01 08:45:00 UTC
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No regrets. (nm) by
on 2016-10-01 16:41:00 UTC
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Bad? by
on 2016-10-01 09:05:00 UTC
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His pun hit the bullseye, and you know it.
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Wait a second... by
on 2016-10-01 00:19:00 UTC
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She's a daughter of Apollo...
But his name's Apollo...
WELL THIS WON'T LEAD TO ANY AWKWARD DISCUSSIONS. :P
Only thing I'm going to nitpick is that Apollo's explanation of his powers felt kind of... I dunno, stilted and expositional rather than natural?
I hope it doesn't take you three years to write a mission with these two because I think they'll be interesting to see. -
And that is one of the reasons I put them together... (nm) by
on 2016-10-01 00:25:00 UTC
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