Subject: Initial thoughts
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Posted on: 2016-08-09 04:28:00 UTC

I liked this.

The bit with Timelord showing up in the RC and getting coaxed through the portal with promises of time paradoxes was pretty darn funny.

I also really liked the lines about the pin drop and Death's grip.

Za'kiir has a point. "I spy" is not very challenging in an RC.

However, you said that Natalie and Za'kiir would be exterminating a planet. There was a distinct lack of planets blowing up in this mission. I've been lied to!!!1111

More seriously, where did the Stu's body end up? I figure it's probably worth defining that more specifically than "portal to somewhere".

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