Specifically, with how Hop is a blatant near-carbon copy of the canon Overwatch character Tracer shoehorned into the PPC. The energetic personality, the Cockney accent, certain details about their appearance; heck, even their first names are the same! You went so far as to put an Overwatch quote on her Wiki page!

I really don't like this. It feels like a transparent attempt to try and write a mashup of Overwatch/PPC fanfiction. What's more, it's lazy. Rather than come up with your own character, this feels like you've took someone else's and barely made a token effort to file off the serial numbers.

I might be a bit more accepting if Hop were some sort of AU version of Tracer recruited to the PPC. I would still think it's a lazy choice, but I would understand it better. But apparently, this character is supposed to be from the Doctor Who universe? The actual universe, and not a badfic? I'm sorry, but that stretches my suspension of disbelief too far. The two universes don't have anything to do with each other! It just seems like a very weak attempt to hide the fact that this isn't really your character. It's like if I made a new agent who was a teenage wizard with a scar on his face and an English accent, named him "Harry McAndrews," then said he hailed from Shadowrun.

Another detail about this character that bothered me: her phonetic accent. There are times where it was overused to the point of being nearly unreadable. At other points, it swayed from Cockney to almost Scottish (like anytime you used "aye" for "yes" or "me" for "my"). The trick with using dialects like this is to use an easy hand (unless the joke is that their accent IS so thick as to be hard to understand).

As for the mission itself, it was generally okay. The biggest issue I had was that there was a lot of telling as opposed to showing. It all very well to say that "Hip and Hop cringed on seeing the contradiction" regarding the venom, but it isn't very interesting to read. What were their reactions? What did they say? Or later on, when Cinder Fall and her cronies were taken care of in one sentence. There's nothing that could have been shown about that?

The dialogue was probably the sharpest part of the mission. Each character's personality came off very well through it. The conclusion was also very good, with the agents being clever and taking advantage of the Stu's weakened state. That, for me, will always be better than a knock-down fight between agent and Stu/Sue.

A few minor things:
— I agree with HG in that your portrayal of the Shadow People was very amusing, even if the tilde speech got a little tiring for me after a while.
— Charge list was clean and to the point. Nice. I am not a fan of lists that stretch for over half a page.
— While the matter is often debated, I personally do not think that miscapitalized words like "semblance" should not result in minis. I think of it like this: say "Harry Dresden" out loud. Now say "harry dresden" out loud. Is there a difference? Then again, that's just me.

All in all, I would have liked the mission a lot more had Hop actually been an original character. If I want to read about Tracer, I'll go read Overwatch fanfiction. The PPC should be for the stuff that comes out of our heads, not what comes out of others'.

A very solid piece. These new agents are fun and quirky -- what I'm starting to realize is my favorite type of spinoff (which means it's time to completely rewrite my Permission prompts again! Whee!). The writing was solid, with plenty of funny moments. I liked the pacing when the C-CAD started smoking. And I could picture the action and understand more or less what was going on, despite being totally unfamiliar with RWBY (although I felt that I was missing a lot. TOS made me read LotR; one more RWBY mission will put me over the edge into needing to watch it).

I did sometimes want more description of their surroundings; you gave the minimum required to understand what was going on, which is okay but not awesome. I can follow and enjoy the story, but I'm not immersed in it. If you have plenty of other things to work on, ignore this, but if you feel nicely accomplished at having created this lovely comedic duo and want another target, I recommend description.

--Key, in an airport at midnight because Delta Airlines screwed up.

I like how you treated the Shadow People, and Hop singing Ode to Joy with a new text, and – what’s that other thing she does? Rap? (I’m not much into music) – and the unconventional use of a canon cannon.

Nitpicks:

Hop noted down new set of charges.
Missing word "the" (or "a")?

... leaving with a mild stomachache.
Missing word "them"?

HG

With Hip & Hop making there mission debut at that!

Like William & VJ, Hip & Hop's interactions are something I feel should be a standard in PPC writings: Light hearted and comedic at times.

Going into the fic, was a tad disappointed you didn't use the joke I made in Discord about Blake and nicknames for her significant other. But that come from my own thought process, not your own.

The Stu was a strange something to behold, with the premise of the Stu becoming prehistoric beasts being something I find fits more comfortably in a SkarmorySilver work. But seeing as how most everything SS knows about RWBY canon probably comes from him following my own Tumblr I couldn't see him doing it.

I was giggling like a madman throughout the entirety of the execution. Frydor, whom I hope to god is free to use, was a welcomed addition, the cannon equally so. If someone ever animated a scene from the PPC, this would be one of my top pics.

All and all it was a most excellent mission, and I await further dwellings into your agents ways.

~Mattman, who finally got his school laptop back.

You used "Beowulf" instead of "Beowolf" three times.

Page 3: "With a quiet poof, a small creature appeared in front of the Agents. It was a miniature version of a Beowulf, but with blonde fur and small spectacles on its snout."

Page 7: "The Stu and his minion came across another duo of future minions — a pair of OCs named Isaac and Dalton. After a cheesy action scene, which mostly comprised of the author telling the reader all of the characters’ weapons and Semblances (Hip grabbed another mini-Beowulf, ‘semblance’, and threw it into a portal), all of their enemies were dead."

Page 10: "~Huh?~ Hip looked down. A mini-Beowulf poofed into existence right in front of them. It had grey fur, spiked on the head, and was wearing a pair of black boots. ~I didn’t expect that.~"

Well, new, you presented them in RPs on the boards before, and Hop through an interlude. Still, happy to see them. Writng her with an accent is also a nice touch. Using shadow people disguise was funny too. Wish I had thought about that when I did my RWBY mission.

Now, te glitterbag had a flashy death, and one caused by its own powers, and like I said, that makes it a favorite for me. Hope them and Venus and William are in for a long time.

As a nitpick, I think you could have tried showing the readings for the C-CAD. The funny comments they can made are always an opportunity to take.