Subject: Fixed, and thank you. :) (nm)
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Posted on: 2016-08-08 13:56:00 UTC
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New mission! by
on 2016-08-02 01:42:00 UTC
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The Supernatural continuum's most popular angel has been replaced with a time-warping, genderbent version of himself.
And did I mention God was replaced as well? -
Errors detected by
on 2016-08-08 13:43:00 UTC
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"We didn't learn hardly anything about her until the end," the Aviator said, rolling her eyes.
Is this quasi-double-negation intentional? Actually they did learn far too much?
"How hard it it to understand it makes no difference?!"
Should be "is".
Please never miss an opportunity to make the Suvians eliminate themselves. Also, I liked how assassinating not!God is a big thing for Zeb, but actually just underwhelming.
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Fixed, and thank you. :) (nm) by
on 2016-08-08 13:56:00 UTC
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Sweet. by
on 2016-08-03 10:52:00 UTC
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It's always great to see the glitterbag being eliminated thanks to is own stupidity. I thnk there's no kill better suited to the PPC than this sort.
Speaking of the Council, I'm also curious to know if you and other people intend to wirte another session of it soon. They never fail to be fun.
Now Zeb, for this little angst about the murder of a version of God, I suggest a cure of Atlus games. Killing a few jerkasses gods should do a wonder for your bewilderment. Just be aware that difficulty will be up to the challenge.
And tiny technical detail: 'Carry On, My Wayward Son” Not sure what quote mark is the wrong one. -
Sour. :P by
on 2016-08-03 10:59:00 UTC
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Like I said, I was originally planning on just stabbing her, but the opportunity presented was just too perfect to pass up. Bonus points in that she was "trying to prevent a paradox" by becoming female only to cause a different one.
I'd have to ask about writing another in the future. Who knows? :P
Fixed the mistake, thanks. :) -
Oh yeah, you were talking about this one! by
on 2016-08-03 00:42:00 UTC
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The summary just shouts that the author wanted an excuse to write this..
Review coming shortly. -
Review by
on 2016-08-03 01:06:00 UTC
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I dont know much about Supernatural as a show, so I'll focus on other aspects.
We seem to have a new Sue colour! I can't imagine what Aurgent would look like, so you've done a good job. Using a fusion of two latin words sounds better than gilver.
The killing god part wasn't particularly dramatic, which is a welcome change to people who have had their blood replaced with nitroglycerine.
Having a Sue erase itself is quite interesting. If only it were so simple for all of them.
Well, that's all I can say. If you'll excuse me, I need to fetch something... Illuminating. -
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on 2016-08-03 01:14:00 UTC
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The color name actually came about because we already had a gildver, and I didn't want to make it sound too similar.
I deliberately made the killing not!God underwhelming because it just seemed funnier to me, and the replacement wasn't really the focus of the story anyway. :)
I was actually planning on just doing a traditional execution for the Sue, but when she went and changed the timeline like that, it was too good an opportunity to pass up... >:) -
This author had such talent. by
on 2016-08-02 17:15:00 UTC
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They replaced both God and an angel. How awesome. Thank goodness it's dead.
Let's see... I noticed two misspellings, oddly both involving the letter L.
1) Bela. Did you meant Bella, as is in Bella Swan, here? Or are names pronounced as Bella just cursed?
2) "... a knife would suddenly in his back." I'm not quite sure how you would kill somebody by putting a would in their back. In fact, I'm not sure that there is a noun spelled 'would'. However, if you're talking about a wound, then that I can understand.
As for what I liked, well, Zeb and the Aviator arguing was hilarious, especially when they started calling each other names. Zeb's mouth is so foul. First meanie, and then jerk? Somebody needs their mouth washed out with soap. Also. how the two deal with having to kill a replacement of God. The actions and reactions are priceless. Awesome as ever. -
Re: This author had such talent. by
on 2016-08-02 21:21:00 UTC
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1) That's actually how the character's name is spelled.
2) Fixed, thanks. ^^;
Come to think of it, I'm fairly certain the nastiest thing Zeb's said is "assbutt" and that was quoting another character. :P Glad you liked it. -
Congratulations! by
on 2016-08-02 04:03:00 UTC
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I think "accidentally erased themselves from existence" is my favorite end for any Sue, ever. XD And Zeb continues to be totes adorbs. Keep up the good work!
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Thanks. :) (nm) by
on 2016-08-02 21:22:00 UTC
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