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Hieronymus Graubart
on 2016-08-08 13:43:00 UTC
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"We didn't learn hardly anything about her until the end," the Aviator said, rolling her eyes.
Is this quasi-double-negation intentional? Actually they did learn far too much?
"How hard it it to understand it makes no difference?!"
Should be "is".
Please never miss an opportunity to make the Suvians eliminate themselves. Also, I liked how assassinating not!God is a big thing for Zeb, but actually just underwhelming.
HG
Sweet. by
Hardric
on 2016-08-03 10:52:00 UTC
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It's always great to see the glitterbag being eliminated thanks to is own stupidity. I thnk there's no kill better suited to the PPC than this sort.
Speaking of the Council, I'm also curious to know if you and other people intend to wirte another session of it soon. They never fail to be fun.
Now Zeb, for this little angst about the murder of a version of God, I suggest a cure of Atlus games. Killing a few jerkasses gods should do a wonder for your bewilderment. Just be aware that difficulty will be up to the challenge.
And tiny technical detail: 'Carry On, My Wayward Son” Not sure what quote mark is the wrong one.
Oh yeah, you were talking about this one! by
DCCCV
on 2016-08-03 00:42:00 UTC
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The summary just shouts that the author wanted an excuse to write this..
Review coming shortly.
This author had such talent. by
Granz the Ice Cream Monarch
on 2016-08-02 17:15:00 UTC
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They replaced both God and an angel. How awesome. Thank goodness it's dead.
Let's see... I noticed two misspellings, oddly both involving the letter L.
1) Bela. Did you meant Bella, as is in Bella Swan, here? Or are names pronounced as Bella just cursed?
2) "... a knife would suddenly in his back." I'm not quite sure how you would kill somebody by putting a would in their back. In fact, I'm not sure that there is a noun spelled 'would'. However, if you're talking about a wound, then that I can understand.
As for what I liked, well, Zeb and the Aviator arguing was hilarious, especially when they started calling each other names. Zeb's mouth is so foul. First meanie, and then jerk? Somebody needs their mouth washed out with soap. Also. how the two deal with having to kill a replacement of God. The actions and reactions are priceless. Awesome as ever.
Congratulations! by
eatpraylove
on 2016-08-02 04:03:00 UTC
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I think "accidentally erased themselves from existence" is my favorite end for any Sue, ever. XD And Zeb continues to be totes adorbs. Keep up the good work!