Subject: Daaaang.
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Posted on: 2018-07-09 20:33:00 UTC
Very intense emotions in this one.
Some wounds don't really heal - even if their damage is more metaphorical.
Also: Loooorsooon. That's one hell of a lie.
Subject: Daaaang.
Author:
Posted on: 2018-07-09 20:33:00 UTC
Very intense emotions in this one.
Some wounds don't really heal - even if their damage is more metaphorical.
Also: Loooorsooon. That's one hell of a lie.
I think this response did a good job of telling the story with almost entirely dialogue. I got a good sense of both agents' personalities (well, it helps that you sort of spelled them out :p) too.
I also liked the reference to Larfen's characters. That sort of interplay is fun.
- Tomash
STANDING OVATION!
Even knowing so little about these two agents, this sets up a delightful contrast between them (which one even points out! The likes surprises/likes being in control dualism is a nice touch).
And, of course, there's fire. ;) Always a pleasant addition.
Well, the ending was a nice twist, and I overall liked the story.
One thing I didn't get, maybe because I didn't read the line about Tiger ruining everything. It felt out of place.
- Tomash
As wonderful as the view was, there was only one place he wanted to be, and that was the one that he’d been foolish enough to leave.
I love this sentence in particular - just want to say that.
And that doorslam at the end was funny. ^^
and I liked the ending with the nickname. The change of tone gave a good ending without being whiplash-y.
(Also, Shadowrun, yeah?)
But really, though, this was great. I could visualize things smoothly as I read along, which is always a good sign. ^^
I've reread this a few times, but I'm afraid I'm not really sure what's going on in this. I wish I could leave a better review for you.
in a different time, if I'd had more guts way back in 2014, I would have written up Permission based on AU versions of these two.)
This one was written more for me than anything. ^^
So, yeah, Lorson's feelings come across rather well in this and it totally makes sense why he'd be spacing out - and lying about it.
- Tomash
Very intense emotions in this one.
Some wounds don't really heal - even if their damage is more metaphorical.
Also: Loooorsooon. That's one hell of a lie.