Subject: Re: story
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Posted on: 2018-07-02 19:51:00 UTC
Very fun! I love the sheer silliness of both AUs, even in the fact that they exist at all. I love that you guys incorporated Redwall-style animal agents to represent the wildlife of both countries. The goose was fun—I especially like that you state so matter-of-factly that it beat up the human agent without describing the fight. Speaking as someone who has had to work with geese, its behavior is . . . FAMILIAR. I would hate for Agent Canada Goose to meet up with Agent Cape Barren Goose from the Australian HQ.
Out of curiosity, what's the meaning of the joke about the DoSAT technicians' names? (At least, it felt like a joke/reference, disregard if I'm wrong.)
The only technical thing my OCD whined about was the phrase, "or some strange place that was some sort of off-AU-HQ." The double "some" plus the vagueness of the phrase "sort of" is making it feel a little washed-out to me. Though I'll admit I can't really come up with a way to rephrase it that doesn't sound clunky, soooo . . . maybe English just isn't equipped to express a phrase like that. *shrug*
—doctorlit, wondering if the CPC only has access to Canadian-made continua . . .