Subject: A few small things
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Posted on: 2018-06-09 01:47:00 UTC

There were a few instances of "the PPC HQ" that tripped my "this sounds off" sense, but maybe that's just me.

Second, how are people pronouncing the exclamation points?

Third, how'd Palmaira know that she might only have Nami's memories?

Overall, this was reasonably well written and a pretty good introduction interlude. It maybe could've used a bit more humor though.

- Tomash

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