Yay, an Iximaz mission that not into a canon I'm planning to consume eventually, so I can read it without spoilers! Because that's why I haven't been commenting on a lot of your other missions lately, if you noticed I wasn't, but you probably didn't notice and I've been making too much of it in my mind but I was afraid of insulting you but I didn't know how to bring it up without sounding weird and

I know I've mentioned on some of the recent Ix-and-Char stories how fun it is that Ix gets to be the stronger, more experienced one now that Charlotte has become human. But I only realized reading this story how valuable it's going to be for Ix's self confidence to shift their focus from their own perceived failings, and to focus more on helping Charlotte become stronger. Which will also make their relationship closer! Yay!

I was going to say something about testosterone not automatically making people easily turned on, but then I remembered that I'm ace, and have no idea how testosterone works in that department. (It works fine for me in the other department. I scared a whole bunch of my coworkers yesterday because they overheard me screaming at boxes of produce.)

—doctorlit, screaming at inanimate objects with regularity

• I wonder whether or not the choice of link text is significant ...
  - Ok, those Overwatch usernames are nice
  - The swordfighting training was a cool thing, and you did a good job of showing Charlotte's level of being in shape compared to Ix
  - ... omai? I think that next bit gets an omai.
  - I'm with Lotte on the "not getting shot" thing
  - Oh, man ... those transitions. inb4 Charlotte gets knocked out by one
  - Narrator, stop acknowledging the innuendos I had in my head :P
  - Ok, I'm not following the dress code thing
  - Oh ... nvm, I didn't notice the hair thing in the fic. That makes sense new (a few paragraphs later)
  - Ok, that's a clever execution method which is going to fail now that you've mentioned it on page
  - Awww. Ix/Lotte in the Jack conversation is cute
  - The middle of a dangerous mission is a perfect time for a snogging session, I'd say
  - Wow, this Sue's massively flip-floppy characterization.
  - Ok, that Ix/Lotte flirting with the accent ... sexy interlude when? :P
  - High speed broom chase?
  - Looks like I didn't need to wait for an interlude :P
  - Took me a moment to figure out that "part of a dream" was the Sues's dream
  - Ok, Jack is funny
  - Oh my, that ending ...
  
  Review: Ok, so that was overall good. You got in a bunch of relationship development for Ix and Charlotte.
  
  One complaint I have is that you hammered in the inconsistent characterization of the Sue a whole lot, comparatively, but that could be because it's the major persistent issue. Idk. Might be worth looking in to.
  
  - Tomash

Torchwood atmosphere or testosterone? Fwai appeared to be more confident before they entered the fic, so it must have been the latter? Or there may be factors at play that Fwai doesn't even think about, like positive effects of having come out (was this only recently?), or Lottie being less overwhelming now that she's struggling with being human. Looks like a perfect reason to reread the whole story arc trying to see the greater picture, and now that I'm no longer working to earn a living, I may even find the time to do it. Or I may just be looking for another pretense to still not start my own spin-off :-)

OT: Also, the Uncanonical Department of Inaccuracies would like to inform you that there is a small inaccuracy in "Neverfree From Working", spilled over from the RP. Richard Legard saying "Now, the Cafeteria, you said?", apparently in response to Ajax sending Desdendelle and the Librarian to the cafeteria, doesn't make any sense. A more reasonable version of that dialog, changing about three lines, may be found at the end of Hardric's mission Backside of the Canon. After one year, I finally got around to tell you this.

HG, procrastinating.