Subject: Re: Okay, that's great, but:
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Posted on: 2017-10-23 02:49:00 UTC
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Hello Ix,
As per the PPC Wiki entry, I looked at the following under "What to include in a Permission Request."
> Brief bios of your agents, about 200 words minimum (though
> up to ~400 is okay). This is so the Permission Givers can chec
> k that they're not blatant Sues or Stus. Please touch on:
> Basic info - Name, species, age, sex/gender, home continuum, e
> tc.
Done. John Smith's home continuity is on page 13 of the PDF, Ayumi's is on page 20 of the PDF, and I've included hyperlinks to the different sections to make it easy to navigate with the bookmarks. The Table of Contents is clickable and the PDF is bookmarked. I've included a lot of information about them and how they came to be kicked out of or left their home continuities, so that you can draw your own conclusions.
I understand I may have gone over budget in word count, but I also felt it was important to explain why as well as some of the background of why I made the choices I did, since this is a homage to a particular genre, and those genres are products of their time. For example, I didn't just pick the Dodge Monaco because it was a cool car (although I personally find the Dodge Monaco a VERY cool automobile!), but because it was an icon of the California Highway Patrol during the 1970s.
> Appearance - What they look like and other physical tra
> its.
Done. They are both described in simile (typical for hard-boiled fiction) on Page 39 of the PDF, in-fic. Ayumi is described in a bit more detail in her own respective section. I realize now there is a mistake on one of the pages that I should have read over, on Page 39 of the PDF it should read "Even a hard-boiled private eye monologue that talked like a simile would've resorted *TO* florid prose." D'oh! I'll fix that next release, sorry about that.
> Personality - Basic demeanor, outlook, habits, likes an
> d dislikes, etc.
> History - Background information such as where they com
> e from, how they joined the PPC, family relations, important f
> ormative experiences, etc. The character's backstory should in
> form their personality and appearancein particular, personalit
> y traits and abilities should be justified by the history.
Done and done. The entirety of how they left their respective home continuities is described in great detail. For formative experiences, Ayumi has quite a number of them between being able to finally break out of her role that her authors locked her into for four seasons of the same show, and John Smith has watched his movie career collapse. More of their actual behaviour and chemistry together is shown in the first chapter of the story, so I hope that that should demonstrate things a bit more.
> Any other traits or abilities we should know about.
Done. Each of the bios includes a trivia section which includes the types of (quirky) powers that they have. I tried to avoid going for standard powers (super speed, invincibility, etc), and simply go for powers that made sense in meta, such as Ayumi creating letters at her feet in a badly rendered font whenever she speaks Japanese because of the quality of the dub, and those badly rendered fonts being 'very sharp' because they were done in poor quality freeware.
> The department you intend to place them in. A complete
> list of existing departments can be found here.
Done. First line on Page 24 of the PDF, the Department of Floaters. I've also made a shoutout to the DoSAT. The avoidance of using Portal Technology is because I felt it would be more fitting to use a travel montage, which were also staples of action adventure films of yesteryear, and can be made to work with the rule of funny. Just think about all the trouble that characters could get into as they try to trace a line across a map, or maybe there is some potential to play it for drama when they realize they need to get somewhere in a hurry but can't just throw a montage down out of nowhere!
> A link to the writing samples you created or the samples th
> emselves copied directly into your post. We want to see how we
> ll you write mechanically, and we really want to see whether y
> ou can write three-dimensional, entertaining characters in a s
> tyle that works for the PPC.
Done. A writing sample is included starting on Page 31 of the PDF. It is the first chapter of my proposed spinoff.
> As mentioned above, your samples
> should be based on a control prompt and a creative or random p
> rompt, discussed in further detail in the Permission Prompt Gu
> idelines.
I used the following two:
3, 3, Agents are transferred to a new department.
5, 3, One agent discloses a secret.
These are covered in more detail in the story, starting on Page 38 of the PDF.
> A link to the badfic you intend to tackle as your first mis
> sion, and a sentence or two explaining why it's bad. This is s
> o we can make sure you've got an eye for what makes a good mission.
I'll actually be writing my own bad fanfiction for this, but I've included a short paragraph about what I'll be doing on Page 10 of the PDF, and how I intend to make it bad. I'm also hoping to finish with an after-action report, as shown by the place holder on page 56 of the PDF.
I believe (to a given degree, thanks to Tor and other privacy tools, but for security reasons I cannot name them all) that I am anonymous to the majority of bad fic authors. Because of this, I feel like it isn't my place to criticize them from a safe, comfortable distance behind their backs, especially given that many of these bad fanfiction authors could have written their bad fanfiction when they were younger and have since moved past them. Or they could still be young and impressionable, and taking huge amounts of flak and ridicule from someone anonymous who they can't trace and can't explain themselves to isn't something I'd feel proud of, as someone who has in the past written bad fanfiction, and would feel very upset if someone behind a several layers of crypto-anonymity dragged it back up to make fun of something I let go a long time back.
This is why I'll be writing my own bad fanfiction, so it's something even bad fanfiction authors would be able to laugh at, and possibly, maybe even identify with and realize that they may make the same mistakes as well, without being mean-spirited.
> The names of your beta reader or readers.
I'd like to get a beta reader, and now that I have the infrastructure set up for it hopefully this should make things much easier. I will definitely list them in future installments.
I hope that this may clarify things somewhat. Please let me know if you have any other questions or concerns.
~3DES.
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