Re: mission (spoilers)

New mission! by Iximaz on 2017-09-03 04:20:00 UTC Reply

The Aviator and Zeb tackle an ATLA dual-bender Sue who sings Disney songs.

Nicely Done! by OpinionedAngel on 2017-09-06 20:54:00 UTC Reply

Short and sweet with no complications. Though I can't believe the author of the fic went and ripped off Moana.

It doesn't help that Moana is easily among my top 5 Disney animated movies...
Interesting mission by son_of_heaven176 on 2017-09-05 02:33:00 UTC Reply

Though it is a bit on the shorter side as far as your usual mission length. Nonetheless, the agent banter was good, as usual.
Re: mission (spoilers) by doctorlit on 2017-09-04 13:51:00 UTC Reply

Nice, standard mission. Nothing complex happened, but you used the weather and Sue song as good sources of frustration for the agents, which makes it even funnier when they get the unexpected boon of the Sue tying herself up. Lainduilien is cute at the end, too. Oh, and I was amused by Elanor making the "prrrp" noise, too.

A typo (which HG probably already said but uh I didn't read other comments oh well):
She sighed an activated it.

—doctorlit is way behind on Disney stuff, still needs to watch Moana
Nitpicks by Hieronymus Graubart on 2017-09-04 11:34:00 UTC Reply

Well, why should I be the one to go to all the trouble of saying nice things?
I’ve only ever seen this as "to go through all the trouble", but my awareness may be limited.

She sighed an activated it.
I’m sure this should be "and".

We’re gonna have to go the Nursery now, Elanor.
Shouldn’t this be "go to the Nursery"?

Others said it already: the friendly banter, the meta-joke about Lainduilien, the fortunate lack of mosquitoes in generic jungles – it’s all so good.

HG

Huh. by Iximaz on 2017-09-04 14:25:00 UTC Reply

I've only ever seen it as 'go to the trouble", and the internet says that is what it's supposed to be, so I'll be keeping both.

Thanks for the other spots, though—they've been fixed.

Glad to hear people have been enjoying the mission, simple though it is. :)

Notes and review by Tomash on 2017-09-03 21:31:00 UTC Reply
- Ave and Dee are doing a wonderful job of the "friendly bickering" component of a relationship
  - Oh, Zeb. Are you going to be poking fun at those two for the whole mission?
  - Elanor is cute
  - ... I had to look up who Lainduilien was - that was a good meta joke
  - Heh. The Aviator's flying.
  - Yes, Zeb, please do play Bingo
  - Trying to clear water out of your head seems like a reasonable response to being italicized
  - Of course DoSAT has a betting pool on how many C-CADS Ave and Zeb will blow up
  - Ok, so this entire fic is basically going to rip off Disnay movies in an Avatar setting with some stupid extra sort of bender tossed in?
  - Good point about two-story houses
  - re: jungle "On second thought, Generic isn't so bad". snrk
  - That's a good description of picking food
  - Ave and Zeb drying off in the TARDIS (with the clothes and the butt-licking) is a cute scene. Also, where did the Aviator get that burn scar?
  - Zeb has a point about the hot guys
  - "thicker than Goyle"
  - I've learned something about wave heights today
  - The scene in which Zeb asks Ave if she'll be OK is touching
  - Nice of the Sue to make the assassination easier
  - Zeb putting on the earmuffs for Elanor. Heh.
  
  So, overall, this was short and had a lot of neat moments between the agents, and took decent advantage of the silliness of the fic to create some funny situations and lines.
Nicely done, senpai! by Matt Cipher on 2017-09-03 18:17:00 UTC Reply

I think Zebbie-boy once again took the spotlight of the fic. I can't help but to be absolutely enamored by his actions, starting from the obvious blockage in the beginning, through the grooming part :P

Also, oh my Elune people are ripping off Moana already!? Yeeesh. Good call with the Glopsnerch, too. Nice to see more obscure PPC tech making it a comeback.
That's beautiful! by The Triumvirate on 2017-09-03 16:00:00 UTC Reply

Really, Ix, I am utterly in awe of how well you write. TEACH ME YOUR WAYS.