Subject: Acceptable? Lol, if you say so. (nm)
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Posted on: 2018-12-31 23:58:00 UTC
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Has Despatch seen any activity lately? by
on 2018-12-30 01:12:00 UTC
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Because if anyone has agents in this department, boy, do I have the fic for you! (I have it in more ways than one. I actually wrote this badfic. I was... 10 or so.)
Hey, everyone, I'm Twistey, and welcome to the first installment of Garbage I Wrote, a multi-post series about terrible pieces of writing I created when I was too young to care what a Mary Sue was. Ah, those were the days. So let's get started with one of our only two fanfics that made it into completion, shall we?
"Haunted Children" takes place in the Real World, and stars four children who have powers associated with prominent villains from four continua. They eventually learn they're the reincarnations... somehow. And there's no suspense whatsoever, nor any indication of why we should care about any of this.
Read it here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kSu4WJnfDW28OvLH4xDlC5SMyrLL95Vq/view
Creative Things You Could Attempt In Response To This:
- Spork it. I'd totally let you do that legitimately.
- MST it.
- Fix the story to make it a goodfic.
- Fix the story to make it an original fic.
- I dunno... recruit the characters? I'd also totally let you do that legitimately.
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That reminds me of some of the stuff I used to write... by
on 2018-12-30 07:44:00 UTC
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SPaG pretty good, but every so often a sentence that makes me wince... I might dig out some of that Warriors monstrosity I wrote a couple of years ago.
Talking of which, you’re a fellow Warriors fan! How much of it have you read? It seems we have more in common than insanity and a liking for elemental wars... -
Yeah, I'm not as much into Warriors as I used to be. by
on 2018-12-31 00:44:00 UTC
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For one thing, I've recently had to often make the choice of whether to write/create in some other way or to read during my free time, and I'm definitely biased towards the writing side.
Another thing is, the series... the mega-series... no, the franchise is intimidatingly long.
And frankly, though I love the world-building, I kind of lost interest in the plot and characters. I don't know why, I just did.
But I still look through its fandom from time to time, because, as I said before, I love the world-building.
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Nor am I. by
on 2018-12-31 07:23:00 UTC
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I gave up partway through the fifth series. I think reading The Apprentice’s Quest was my first encounter with the fact that not all published work is brilliant.
Unfortunately what I tried to write in response, as you can tell from that Prologue, didn’t exactly turn out that way. Your fic looks acceptable by those standards! -
Acceptable? Lol, if you say so. (nm) by
on 2018-12-31 23:58:00 UTC
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So, I found it... by
on 2018-12-30 13:54:00 UTC
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Not going to post the whole fic as it's fifty-four pages long, but here's the prologue.
Prologue
In a clearing in the middle of a lush green forest was an old, large rock, bleached white from many moons of sun. Four huge oaks stood around it, old and withered, but immensely tall. There was a rustle in the nearby bushes, and a flame-coloured tom padded out. He padded to the rock and leaped onto it with his muscular hind legs. He seemed to be waiting for something. A moment later a small black-and-white tom with a very long tail padded out of the bushes.
“Tallstar! Good to see you again!” mewed the flame-coloured cat. Tallstar nodded.
“And you, Firestar. Have you seen the others?” Firestar shook his head. Just then, a huge white tom with jet black paws joined them, dwarfing his companion, a spotted she-cat.
“Blackstar! Leopardstar! What kept you?” asked Tallstar. Blackstar sighed.
“Stonefur came along. He wanted to know what we were doing.” The bushes rustled once more, and a grey-and-white tom joined them.
“Sorry I’m late,” he mewed, “but it’s a long journey.” Firestar raised his tail in greeting.
“Cloudstar, it’s moons since I last saw you!” Cloudstar purred.
“You too. Without you, I wouldn’t be here.”
A fifth cat joined them. He was almost as large as Blackstar, but a dark, mud-splattered, grey.
“Greetings. I meant to arrive sooner, but I lost track of the time.”
“Does any cat here know when moonhigh is?” Blackstar mewed sarcastically.
“Typical ShadowClan!” This was the first time Leopardstar had spoken.
Another cat came through the bushes, small, blind and ugly. He was followed by a badger.
“At last!” mewed Blackstar. “Now can we start?” The ugly cat, Rock, nodded.
“Six moons have passed since the Great Battle.” The seven cats and the badger nodded.
“Clans have enjoyed moons of peace.” , the badger murmured.
“But a new evil is rising.” mewed Rock. “Five Clans and Tribe will be in danger.” They padded through the bushes to another clearing, in the centre of which was a large, clear pool.
“One cat alone can save Clans.” growled the badger. The seven cats and the badger stared into the misty depths of the pool. For a moment the water shimmered, and then the cats and the badger could see, in the depths, a light brown she-cat and a russet-brown tom curled up in the hollow in the roots of an old elm tree.
“She is the one.” The group all nodded.
“Bright leaves can halt darkness.” mewed Rock. “I will tell Jayfeather.” The badger nodded. “That is good. All six must know. Tell Willowshine, Kestrelflight, Echosong, Littlecloud and Stoneteller.
Rock mewed, “Each leader should tell their own healer. Firestar? You must explain it to her.” Then the group merged into the bushes, and the pool shimmered once more, and then returned to clear water, as if nothing had happened.
Apologies for the lack of paragraph breaks; I'm reproducing the original format. *cringes madly* -
Suddenly I'm glad I destroyed most of my early work. (nm) by
on 2018-12-31 00:16:00 UTC
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