I have to say, you really got better with your writing. Still, it's a long read, and I wish all of it was as funny as the Arster.

Things I noticed:

• Everything is a mini. If you have that many minis, you can handle them differently, especially the capitalization-based ones. I would have turned 'weeping angels' into exactly that. A bunch of angels that weep. Probably at the badness of the fic. The doctor could have been a random doctor (not necessarily of medicine, be creative here). And do you know how many things go by the word jack?
• You need to learn how to dose fic quotes. They shouldn't be too long and, ideally, showcase a thing you found. Like the Wapanese heart disease. You could have quoted the first time it was mentioned.
• You like capitalizing things, do you? Things you shouldn't capitalize:
  • Agent, unless it's used as "Agent [name]."
  • Colors, even if they're Suvian in nature.
• You don't need to read the full charge list. You really don't need to read the full charge list.

Brilliant first mission; well done!

I must say, that is an awful lot of minis - and here was I thinking that the fourteen (in only three-hundred and fifty-seven words) mini-Colossi that I found on my first mission was a lot. Have some Bleepolate - I think your agents are going to need it after that fic.

There are so many different minis from Artemis Fowl... which is not hard to spell...

I would think (though I don't know,) that holly, frond, and grub would be represented as their natural counterparts (a bush, a leaf, and a bug,) due to the fact that they are now common nouns.

Mind if I take Artemis Fowlor? I am extremely saddened that I didn't get tinky-winky. You better take good care of that Noo-noo! //sobs

Mind if I nab Gnomish? (or is it already taken?)

That was probably one of the silliest (in a good way, like ha-ha silly, not what-is-this-I-don't-even silly) missions I've ever read - and being unfamiliar with Artemis Fowl and Doctor Who didn't help.

I will say that I rather enjoyed Anebrin's initial reaction to the minis, though. I found it kind of adorable~

Ooh, and about the 'ending a quote with a period rather than a comma' charge: I might be wrong, but I think it's okay to do that if you don't follow the quote up with sommat like 'she said' or 'he chided'.

Example: "I'm giving you an example," he explained.
"I'm giving you a different example." The second speaker's eyes twinkled with mirth.

All in all, though, great job on your first mission, des!

Good mission. I already said my part while betaing, so, uh, yeah.

Are you going to do that Artemis Fowl/Nanoha crossover next?