Re: mission by
doctorlit
on 2019-08-06 14:10:00 UTC
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Hurrrrrr wow. You, uh. You sure did find a badfic, there. Wow. Okay.
Yeah, when I saw this was a rapefic mission, I really didn't get very excited about reading this. Upon getting through, I'm glad you were able to keep the focus on the anatomical description failures and such to keep it humorous, rather than just the spectacle of the sex itself.
Ruxanda is cool. I like that she's kind of a laid back, not-angry vampire. I guess she doesn't have to worry about lung problems from all that vaping, since she's already dead and doesn't breathe.
I also liked seeing the little moments that show Melissa and May are already growing closer to each other, even though their personalities have a tendency to clash.
—doctorlit, more jump-scared by robot slash than robot murder
Here comes an interlude! by
Mirage Fontane
on 2019-08-04 11:55:00 UTC
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In which we see how Melissa and Ruxanda are getting along, and someone strange appears in HQ.
https://rc746.dreamwidth.org/1125.html
I like it! by
Ozzielot
on 2019-08-02 16:19:00 UTC
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I found the mission to be fun to read and I like Ruxanda's character.
Good mission by
SillyPhilly
on 2019-08-02 16:11:00 UTC
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Choice quote:
"Do we charge for runaway body parts?:
"We do now."
I liked this by
Tomash
on 2019-08-02 04:26:00 UTC
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I think you did a good job handling the fic, and thas was an interesting ending.
I like the line about not using the words "Freddy" and "stuffed" in the same sentence for a while, because that makes a lot of sense.I also like the "running out of the RC" bit from the beginning - seems like the right reaction to this fic.
Looking forward to seeing more stuff.
One typo I saw: "vampiric strength; then, she took his" has an extra comma.
(Full disclosure, I don't know the canon much, but I can still sense why this fic is bad)
Very nice! by
S.M.F.
on 2019-08-02 00:05:00 UTC
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Ruxanda is quite a character, and I enjoyed getting to know her - you differentiate her from both May and Melissa well.
I don't know the source of the Agent Trojie misquote, but now I want to find it.
I did notice one tense shift: "The agents stared at the OC, who delivered this bit of dialogue in a flat monotone, including the moaning - which sounds really disturbing when clearly enunciated." sounds -> sounded
Also (this is a complaint at the fic, not you) Chica is not a duck.
Then (this is for the mission) Melissa is not referred to as regaining consciousness before they portal ahead.
I did like the fan being used for something!
And I also liked the Hope Spot/plot twist before the mission could end smoothly.
Thank you for writing! =D