But I did like your samples! The first prompt was genuinely heartwarming. The characters give me a fairly strong slice-of-life vibe. I am curious- what's Harvey's original story? Is he from the same one as Jack? It's a bit hard to tell.
Looking forward to your first mission!

I've seen you around, you're cool, and I have very little critique for you.

The main bit of critique I have is for the second story, in which you spend all this time building up the mystery of where the DORKS is hiding and then don't tell us what funny thing it's disguised itself as! ... Unless it was the headphones? But if that's the case, it wasn't clear that the headphones weren't just headphones. It reads like Harvey finds the headphones, then finds the DORKS under them or something.

To be fair, I have heard the headcanon (from Ix, I think) that the DORKS only disguises itself on missions, so if that's what you're going with it's fine, but I'm old-school, and I say never pass up the opportunity for a sight gag. {= P

(That's actually serious PPCing advice. Always be looking for a way to make a funny scene funnier. {= D )

Also, a small mechanical issue: make sure to fix your smart quotes so they're pointing the right way after an em dash. You've got a couple places where someone's speech is broken up with dashes, and the open-quote of the second bit of dialogue is facing the wrong way.

I do worry a little about things getting too heavy with Jack, but he reads very enjoyably, so I think it'll be fine. Also, I'm hardly in a position to talk. ^_^;

Go forth and spork, young human!

~Neshomeh

...but I can tell that your writing is looking good! Can't wait to see your first mission!