Subject: I did the thing!
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Posted on: 2019-06-15 02:53:00 UTC

And now I'm doing the other thing, on my phone, from a train, so I apologize for any errors.

Generally, I like it! Interestingly, I feel like there were two stories here, one about the two characters touring Earth and one about them joining the PPC. I would have liked to read more of the first one, because that sounds fun. I also think giving them a little more time to become familiar with each other and settle into the dynamic they'll have as agents might have been beneficial, because I get the sense that the camaraderie of the writers has bled over into the characters, making them just a bit too comfortable and open with each other just a bit too quickly for the cultural(?) gulf between them.

On the other hand, I could be projecting, because I know I'm guilty of doing that myself. ^_^;

Anyway, I like the concept, taking odd couple partners to a natural extreme--or what would be an extreme with an angel and a demon from just about any other world. With these two being Pratchett-flavored, I reckon they'll do better than they expect in HQ.

... And now I'm trying to imagine the look on Zaphoriel's face the first time someone asks if she knew the Great God Pterry. This gives me many and varied feels.

I did spot a typo toward the end, "me" instead of "we," but I'm not sure exactly where. One of Zaphoriel's lines, I think.

Oh, out of curiosity, what is the inspiration for the decor in their RC? I thought that was cool, and it's always nice to give a nod to the PPC's turnover. Gives it depth. And, is the lingering evil anything specific?

~Neshomeh

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