That was really solid. The LP's gleeful malevolence was bone-chilling, and I love Dawn's charging into the confrontation without really thinking through the consequences.

The one thing it leaves me wondering is how death-proof Jacques is afterwards. Is he going to do the full Harkness immortality? Or just narrow scrapes after scrapes? That wasn't clear to my reading.

And, I blame you for this.

After just about the same set of discussions, 6k-ish words of writing happened, leaving me now having written more of these two in an AU than the prime multiverse.

For those who don't hang around the Discord, Prime!Sarah is a phoenix from Skin Deep who is only recently coming to grips with not being human, and Prime!Talia is a slightly-modified human from Trekverse, with an aquatic bent.

I've always loved manipulation of the rules of magic to pull off an unexpected result, and this is a brilliant example. I love how you used Jacques' POV to feed the reader limited information, so we can learn and be amazed-slash-horrified along with him.

I have to wonder what kind of price Dawn will have to pay for that trick, though. It sounds an awful lot like a Blank Cheque spell, and those are weighty things to be tossing around.

The rest of the story is also good. At the risk of sounding slightly disturbing, the description of the violence is perfectly pitched - not too gory, but also not too squeamish.

hS

I approve of this general trend~

Well, you didn't waste any time getting right to it, did you? Scary stuff! I was not prepared. Kinda made me want to hide under a blanket.

This is a good thing. {= )

I don't have much to say with regards to canon, because it's been a long time since I read the books myself, but it seems to fit well enough. I'm not sure if the confrontation was meant to be an Ordeal or regular errantry (if you can call it that), but I'm guessing the latter? The LP isn't guaranteed to be involved anywhere except an Ordeal (unless your name is Callahan or Rodriguez), but it just doesn't give me that vibe, I think because Jacques doesn't read as young enough to be on his Ordeal.

Oh, minor note, but IIRC, the PTBs always get capitalized pronouns in the books.

I like the inclusion of the Doctor and Rose. It's always amused me that the Doctor exists in the YWverse, which makes this AU practically compulsory. {= )

~Neshomeh

That ending was... wow. Just wow. Right in the feels.

Absolutely spectacular AU, Zing—I might just have to play in this world sometime.

Specifically, one for Doktor Trollenfisch und Gabrielle.

More on this as it develops.