"Yet another childhood ruined by badfic" is a good line.

The writing flows really well.

I like the bit with Merry and Pippin getting flashy-thinged to keep the badfic going.

It is too bad you can't fit "pissing off PPC agents" into exorcisms. I mean, you probably could if you fiddled with the mission structure, some, but there's not usually a good place for it.

Re talking without being noticed: apparently PPC missions can be educational.

It's nice to see missions pointing out positives or potential positives about a fic. It's a trend (though the dataset is small) I've been seeing more of these days, I think, and I'd say it's a good thing.

The illusion thing was clever, and it's good that Liz was as confused as I was, because that scene left me wondering wtf just happened too.

Overall, I got a good sense of the core of the problems with the fic, and, more importantly, the mission was a smooth and engaging read!

I'm assuming the first page of setup was a setup for the illusion thing? If not, it's not quite clear why the narrative focus at the beginning didn't quite seem to lead anywhere or establish much (except maybe a general tension that led to the are-ace rage moment). That could just be 11 PM talking though.

Anyhow, looking forward to more

Welp. That sure was some smut. And I think I agree with your in-character assessment that the author just didn’t know a lot of details about Middle-earth, like “Arwen exists” and “the Brandybucks and Tooks are relatives.”

I don’t think I’ve seen a slash mission that divided the exorcisms up into sections like this before. It was interesting seeing how the circumstances in each one necessitated different plans of action from the agents. I’m especially amused by having to neuralyze Merry and Pippin into continuing the badfic, just so things wouldn’t go off the rails down the line. I also find it funny that the wraith possessing Aragorn and Legolas was so much weaker than the other two (being a smoochy-face wraith and not a pants-down wraith) that it just got shouted out of existence. Makes sense!

Yeah, making romantic love out to be more valid than friendship love irritates me, too. And we certainly have enough of that sentiment rattling around in pop culture as it is. I hope Liz (and you) aren’t too put-out over this experience!

A couple lines with missing words:

“She was playing something on her 3DS, having to somewhat awkwardly hold onto without disturbing Vulpix.”

I forget the fancy phrasing, but that second sentence is missing a ‘target’ for the verb “hold,” which makes the 3DS kind of vanish from the thought.”awkwardly hold onto it without” will fix things up.

“Summoning and shattering a mirror, the bit died with a face full of glass.”

Since Avery is absent from this sentence, it sounds like the bit elf is doing the mirror magic. Couple of possible fixes; this one changes the least from your original sentence:

“Summoning and shattering a mirror, Avery left the bit dead with a face full of glass.”

But there lots of ways to fix that, if that version doesn’t feel right for you.

—doctorlit, also acearo, mostly, probably