Subject: Thoughts
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Posted on: 2020-06-04 06:28:36 UTC
"Yet another childhood ruined by badfic" is a good line.
The writing flows really well.
I like the bit with Merry and Pippin getting flashy-thinged to keep the badfic going.
It is too bad you can't fit "pissing off PPC agents" into exorcisms. I mean, you probably could if you fiddled with the mission structure, some, but there's not usually a good place for it.
Re talking without being noticed: apparently PPC missions can be educational.
It's nice to see missions pointing out positives or potential positives about a fic. It's a trend (though the dataset is small) I've been seeing more of these days, I think, and I'd say it's a good thing.
The illusion thing was clever, and it's good that Liz was as confused as I was, because that scene left me wondering wtf just happened too.
Overall, I got a good sense of the core of the problems with the fic, and, more importantly, the mission was a smooth and engaging read!
I'm assuming the first page of setup was a setup for the illusion thing? If not, it's not quite clear why the narrative focus at the beginning didn't quite seem to lead anywhere or establish much (except maybe a general tension that led to the are-ace rage moment). That could just be 11 PM talking though.
Anyhow, looking forward to more