Subject: Okay so...
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Posted on: 2020-06-24 16:12:17 UTC
...I realized that my characterization is a bit lacking, so I'm not going to use my current draft for my Permission attempt. However, I would still like you two to take a look at it and see if you can identify some of the problems with my writing.
I'm saying this because I left the bios unfinished due to my lack of good characterization, so you will now understand that.
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As the title says, I would like experienced betas to look over my Permission request before I publish it. The request is about 2,400 words, bios included. What I feel my biggest weaknesses are are flow and the clarity of my sentences, so be on the lookout for that.
Also, I'd like to put in a special request for Ix to beta my request as she was the one who rejected my last attempt, and therefore knows better than anyone else the weaknesses of my writing.
...I realized that my characterization is a bit lacking, so I'm not going to use my current draft for my Permission attempt. However, I would still like you two to take a look at it and see if you can identify some of the problems with my writing.
I'm saying this because I left the bios unfinished due to my lack of good characterization, so you will now understand that.
Links are sent.
So you're not actually asking us to beta your Permission attempt. You're actually asking for us to have a look at some drafts that might evolve into your Permission attempt? I'm kinda confused. Still happy to have a look, but confused.
...I made this thread intending for you to beta a Permission Attempt, but then I realized that my characters weren't in good enough shape yet. I'm asking you to beta the drafts anyway, though, because I think your feedback will be useful in creating another draft.
I'll be totally honest, it's been a while since I did a beta, but happy to help.
But I've Beta'd in the past and want to try and step up my writing game again.
You should be able to click my name to get my email address. Otherwise it's stormehawk@gmail.com.
Nova