Subject: Re: mid-mission . . . interlude? No, intermission! Ha ha ha! Intermission!
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Posted on: 2020-07-12 20:39:50 UTC

Hey, this was a lot of fun to read! The light, PPC-standard tone of the opening scene made the emotional impact of the actually scary scary story stronger. I'm very intrigued by RC 1000 (that number wasn't taken yet!? What?!) and what could have happened in there to make the HQ dimensions go all wonky. I . . . hope Sierra is rescue-able in some fashion? Though I understand if this is meant to function more as a setting-expanding legend and not a proper plot hook. Also, it's interesting that May isn't actually telling the story as we-the-readers are hearing it, which I assumed was happening in real time while I was reading that section. I'm a little surprised May is keeping this secret from Melissa, especially considering it occurred while they were partnered.

When Melissa was telling the Rose Potter story in the beginning, I got real spooked. Not by Potter, but by the revelation that Headquarters has communal showers. Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!

But do you know what's even scarier?

. . .

. . .

A typo!

"'I must have imagined it, or remember the wrong place.'"
"remembered"

Oh, by the way, have you come across the Halloween Co-Write stories yet? They're right up your alley! I should have thought to point them out to you before . . . Sorry!

—doctorlit and his nightmares about shared showers in an unstable inter-dimensional universe

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