Subject: Thoughts
Posted on: 2021-11-30 20:42:38 UTC

  • Elanor is cute
  • “What else can they through at us? The actual My Immortal?” … snickers
  • At least they have popcorn
  • Poor Grover
  • The human beauty rituals bit is funny and a bit of a mood
  • The eluded kill scene feels like it needs a horizontal rule or one of the other scene transition marker things (unless there is one there and GDocs on the iPad didn’t show it). I got lost in the time jump.
  • … Oh no.

Overall thoughts: We get a good sense of what the problem is and a decent amount of character interactions. This definitely feels like a setup for mission 100, which isn’t necessarily bad - just thought I’d note the impression.

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