Subject: Yeah, that's a yikes, all right.
Posted on: 2022-01-05 16:18:44 UTC
I'll add that the paragraphing in the story is a mess, too; I actually went back and looked a bit closer. I hate arguing from ignorance. Alas. >.>
However! None of that necessarily means it's mission material. The question becomes, would the mission be fun to read? And, perhaps more importantly, would it be fun to write? Fics that exclusively make you angry or horrified tend to be un-fun to mission and, as a direct result, un-fun to read. What tends to work best is something with one or two elements that make it a deal-breaker on top of many errors that make you laugh along the way. Being able to see how the fic could have been better helps, too, since it allows you to make more interesting commentary than "that's wrong, that's bad, that's gross." Not that reactions are bad, of course—the trick is for the agents to react in ways that are funny of themselves—but if that's all you have to say, it doesn't make for a good story, and the goal of a mission is always to tell a good story in addition to being a fun deconstruction of the fic.
I wouldn't recommend missioning this, because I don't think there's that much intrinsic humor to extract from it and I don't think it would be worth the effort to try. Plus, again, we're not here to attack the kink itself, so probably best to avoid a fic written specifically to feature said kink.
If you haven't done so yet, I recommend reading some of the guides on the wiki, such as the Slash-Sporking Guide and the more general Guide to the PPC and Mission-Writing Guide. It's a good way to get a better idea of the approach we take to badfic and what we do and don't find mission-worthy.
Of course, the BEST way is to read more missions, and I can't suggest a better place to start (besides the Original Series, of course) than with Agent Trojanhorse of the Department of Bad Slash. Two caveats: we don't mission real-person fic anymore, and we don't make comments about the author anymore. A lot has changed since 2004! In general, though, RC 45 remains a fine example of how to handle delicate subject material in a way that is non-judgemental and hilarious.