Subject: Do-S
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Posted on: 2022-02-02 12:39:33 UTC
Is Japanese slang for "huge sadist". Can also be called just S (sadist). The opposite is M (masochist) or do-M (huge masochist). Both carry fetishistic undertones.
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After much dawdling and procrastination, part 3 of new mission by
on 2022-01-31 20:15:18 UTC
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Watch as the Sue's behavior, the Bad History and Bad Formatting continue to get worse, and this Ishitani person continue to get suspicious.
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re: mission by
on 2022-02-02 12:27:25 UTC
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For being based on such a simple, straightforward romance fic, you're certainly constructing an intriguing mission here!
I love that your narrator got even more snarky towards the agents when the script format arrived, like it felt emboldened by being on a more equal level with the characters! I also really enjoyed Ishitani's speech about what unhealthy sorts of things people can be conditioned to tolerate when consuming romance in fiction. What is the "do-S" he mentions, though? I can't find anything through searching but a One-Punch Man character.
There's one sentence with an awkward structure:
"This man she barely knew and she was nowhere near fond of, but . . ."
You've got the "object" (the man) before the "subject" (Momoka) that's acting on it. It would work better as:
"She barely knew this man, and she was nowhere near fond of him, but . . ."—doctorlit suspects something about Ishitani's identity, but doesn't want to say anything for fear of ruining the surprise for other readers