Subject: Wonderful picture.
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Posted on: 2022-02-18 21:18:46 UTC
That's very nice, and the messages are cute. The subdued shading is nice and the linework is crisp, visually pleasing, and confident. One thing to note, though, is that the eye is only about halfway up the head, not three-quarters of the way up the head. This is a pretty common error in drawing faces, but once you know, faces look a lot more natural with it.
For this occasion we are pleased to present Like a Wink and a Smile Episode 2, Part 3: "Shall We Dance?" (AO3)
This chapter features the stroll through scenic New Caledonia that was supposed to happen and dancing at Club Aujourd'hui.
As always, if you're new to LWS, we recommend starting the series from the beginning with "Crossing the Coffee Table" (AO3) and "Attachments" Parts 1 and 2 (AO3).
Cheers to Lily Winterwood for illustrating an image from Part 3 with text from Part 1 for one of this year's PPC Valentines!
Keep an eye out for more of these coming up in another thread. ^_^
Meanwhile, we hope you enjoy the story. Be our Valentine and let us know what you think! ❤️
~Neshomeh & Zingenmir
I really enjoyed... well, all of it, but also the tour of New Cal. Spot-the-anachromism was perfect, and I was very pleased by the description of Club Aujourd'hui.
(Also by the implication that Blue, Immy, and Nancy all hang out there. Do we have other ghosts? Honestly I'd be surprised if we didn't at this point...)
hS
New Caledonia is really starting to get fleshed out! I'm probably going to have to set some action from my spin-off there eventually, though I'm intimidated by the thought of getting the geography consistent with what's come before. Still, I'm excited by what a big playground is being built out there!
I don't know dancing at all, but I enjoyed the choreography of the dance scene, and how they both reacted to each other's words and motions throughout it, each dominating the movement/conversation at different times. The little details from Jenni's life on Pern were cool to hear about, too!
—doctorlit is totally going to read Pern someday, he swears. He might even read it in publication order like Neshomeh suggested, but in-universe chronological order is such a flirtatious dance partner, if you know what he means. (doctorlit himself doesn't know what he means.)
I didn't like the idea when it first became a thing, because it seemed like too much of a departure from the normal setting, but of course it grew on me once I started working with it. I figured, if we were gonna have it, we should treat it as the real place it is and not just a Generic Anglo/Euro/American Place with a name pulled out of a hat by a game, so I started learning. The IRL New Caledonia is ecologically, culturally, and historically interesting, and beautiful in photos, and I really want to visit someday. ^_^
No need to worry about losing track of the geography! Me being me, I went and made a map of the PPC city based on all the descriptions I could find, and I'm attempting to keep it and the wiki article on New Cal up to date.
Thanks for the comments on the story. Neither Zing or I know much about dancing, either, but I leaned really hard on stuff I picked up from Dancing with the Stars? {X D I'm glad if it works to animate the literal and emotional dialogue.
I'm also glad if other people find Jenni's history interesting! It's nostalgic for me, since most of it comes from actual role-plays and stuff I was involved in, but of course that doesn't necessarily mean anyone else wants to hear it, haha.
And yes. Do read Pern. Dooo iiiit. {= D
~Neshomeh, shamelessly recruiting people into her fandoms.
...ack, given Jacques, that looks like an innuendo. Whoops. What I actually mean is that I had dance lessons of various types for a good chunk of my life growing up! Mostly not the type of dancing in this story, though, and I'm not used to writing about it, overall. I could probably do more with, say, a ballet scene, but that wouldn't have fit.
Thanks for reading, doc! (And Tomash, and anyone else who has!) Glad you enjoyed the scene. And yeah, New Cal really has expanded a lot. On the plus side, if you want to add something more (and thus only really have to deal with situating it when it comes to consistency), I'm sure there's still room...
~Z
And as for Jenni's backstory, I would personally love reading a prose chronicle of it some day . . . though I recognize that might get tricky, with the other RPers' characters being present . . .
—doctorlit will read what he can get!
That's very nice, and the messages are cute. The subdued shading is nice and the linework is crisp, visually pleasing, and confident. One thing to note, though, is that the eye is only about halfway up the head, not three-quarters of the way up the head. This is a pretty common error in drawing faces, but once you know, faces look a lot more natural with it.
Thanks for the concrit! I do prefer to stylise my work towards a more cartoony feel, so realism isn’t necessarily what I was aiming for. I’m glad you liked the linework and colours though.
I have a separate art thread from this one specifically so that I would not detract from Nesh and Zing’s story. I’m sure they would appreciate thoughts on their work as well 😄