re: mission by
doctorlit
on 2022-03-01 01:53:23 UTC
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Aha! A mission actually set in 1984! Except it's not; what a disappointing concept. I was all excited to see the agents having to navigate around telescreens, and the fic just goes and gives us a generic Earth setting. Oh well.
I think you handled it well, though, considering the source material. The idea of having one of the not-quite-canons notice the agents, and then start becoming aware of all the badfic weirdness, is a fun one, and it gives Matthew some early empathy development, too!
—doctorlit still hopes for agents to be properly endangered by a 1984 badfic someday, but recognizes there just isn't a lot of source material to work with : (
Notes and thoughts (now posted correctly) by
Tomash
on 2022-02-26 22:28:35 UTC
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Minor note: I'm pretty sure Paye didn't throw the RC. RA, maybe?
"The air became thicker as dialogue happened one right after another, rather than spaced properly with paragraph breaks" just doesn't read as gramatical - I think this is missing a word somewhere.
The bit where Matthew notices going on was a very solid transition to the kill, and the ending worked reasonably well.
Psst, a heads-up by
K. n. Shirayuki
on 2022-02-25 05:04:41 UTC
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Your site is rather hard to read on mobile; the layout causes the avatar icon to force the text into a really narrow collumn.
Oop, forgot commentary. by
Kittyauthor
on 2022-02-24 19:56:00 UTC
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I apologize for not publishing the interlude first. I'm having a bit of a time trying to write that, so I'm sorry. I hope that isn't too disappointing.
-kA