Subject: 😆 thanks for the review!
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Posted on: 2022-03-22 09:05:50 UTC
I'll fix the mistakes shortly 😉
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New, very short, mission + adoptable minis by
on 2022-03-16 12:27:34 UTC
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RC 🤘's first mission mainly serves to somewhat flesh out the agents' characters, especially Inasuke, which is why it's short and, IMO, isn't as exciting as my other missions. The later chapters of the fic are rather boring, so it wouldn't be of much use to drag the mission out longer.
Both minis, Pusheens the mini-this thing and Neko Autisumi the mini-Ritzy Bitz, are adoptable as of this writing.
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re: mission by
on 2022-03-18 14:42:51 UTC
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Huh. Interesting mission! I've never heard of Pusheen, and based on this mission, I wouldn't have thought it would have enough canon to it to work as a mission. But by focusing on the disparity in tone between the canon and the fic (as well as all the nicked gifs), I think you made it work!
I'm also amused by how hilariously opposite the personalities of Urato and Inasuke have grown! Urato being so hyper-masculine, and Inasuke enjoying cutesy stuff . . . they really make a great pair! By which I mean, "great to read about," not "they're going to get along so well!" : )
—doctorlit
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Now that was fast; yet another new mission by
on 2022-03-18 05:09:37 UTC
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This time as we get back to RC 381, Momo seems to have a dilemma.
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re: mission (spoilers) by
on 2022-03-22 02:29:35 UTC
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Aw, poor Momoka. While it's nice that Kaguya isn't putting himself in danger any more, I can understand how Momoka can feel like she has a less active role now. (Though I suspect most agents would be grateful for such "normal" missions!) I wish she would see herself more as Kaguya's friend than his maid.
I liked the detail of the phrase from classical Japanese mysticism being used during the exorcism, very appropriate and clever. And I'm excited to see whatever shenanigans HQ has in store for Kaguya! (Though I suspect I know where he's about to end up.)
A couple errors:
"What ever shall Momoka do when her master no longer wandered in fits of 'angry mode'?"
Since this sentence starts in. . . uh . . . future . . . future, some kind of future tense, future imperfect?in future something tense, "wandered" should switch to "wanders." Which is . . . present tense. I don't know why it works that way in English, it just does!"'. . . you choose disguises, write down charges and carry equipments . . .'"
"Equipment" is already a plural word, so it doesn't need an "s" on the end.—doctorlit, keeping up with publishing as best he can
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😆 thanks for the review! by
on 2022-03-22 09:05:50 UTC
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I'll fix the mistakes shortly 😉
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Have read, no coherent thoughts at the moment (nm) by
on 2022-03-18 00:02:14 UTC
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