Subject: re: mission
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Posted on: 2022-04-18 18:07:53 UTC

Sorry I didn't review sooner; it's been a pretty packed week!

Wow, Strawberry Shortcake is still a thing?! Like, ongoing? I didn't realize it had any new canon produced after the 1980s. I remember my sisters still had some SS wow, no, bad acronym on that title SBSC merch sitting around the house as I grew up. Weird that I never heard anything about new material, even by accidental add viewing! Well, on behalf of my now-adult sisters, thank you for defending this canon!

Sand dollars, eh? Clever use of a non-currency currency on the show's part. A mini that's more like an object is a unique concept, especially with how it can affect people! Are the minis like actual sand dollars, like, can they crawl very slowly? Maybe need salt water to stay hydrated properly?

I like how you structured this mission, with Urato getting enticed to wander away for more sand dollars, only to get caught up in the flashback. It felt like a very natural narrative progression! I also like the point Inasuke made about not performing assassinations within SBSC, since it would have the wrong tone for that canon. It felt like a very Original Series-esque observation to make!

A couple minor errorish things:
"This was however not the most aggravating the house had to offer."
I feel like either "aggravating thing" or "aggravation" would be a little more grammatically correct, there. Just feels like a noun belongs in there.

". . . in an undescribed environment of endless beige where Avocado and black licorice converse."
I think you want "conversed" here, just to match the past tense of the rest of the paragraph?

—doctorlit got a weird sense of enjoyment from picturing SBSC characters dissolving Infinity Stone-style

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