Subject: And this is why I shouldn't review while sleepy and just waking up.
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Posted on: 2022-06-20 22:34:45 UTC
I just realised "never fails to disappoint" is NOT what I meant. I liked the story hS, I just can't phrase things properly. X'D
It just returns an error message.
Can you provide the error message? I might be able to help then, but no promises.
hS
It still can't open in the Docs app, but I managed to open it in the browser.
I'm not as brushed up on The Classics of the PPC and have basically forgotten how to memorize names (or pay attention to them), so the agent references in the coverage of the boat race were a bit lost on me, but I was still able to infer the relevant character traits and thus get the jokes based on their structure. Speaking of structure, I like how they break that supposed "anonymity" they'd given Dafydd's wife (whom I will not name here to preserve anonymity). It's one of those neat details that you only notice on reread, which speaks to your willingness not to insult your audience's intelligence. Bet they're getting a summons from Legal with Constance Illian-Sims's name on it! Page 4 is typical yellow-journalism fare, again slightly lost on me as I don't know these people but still amusing. It hits especially hard today! Page 5 was also nice, although it's a little too real for my comfort, specifically. Which just makes it better! Looking forward to more shenanigans in the future.
...the majority of the agents mentioned here seem to be agents introduced in Ye Olden Days. That's not a bad thing, these are the agents that have the most established continuity and they don't see much action outside of MM, but it would be nice to see a few callbacks to newer continuity, too! Like Kittyauthor and O'Ryan, or Kaguya and Momoka. Of course, I don't know how these are made, so feel free to correct me if this isn't a good idea.
In this case, 'someone' was me, and I pretty much just wrote my own agents. The only exception is the Boat Race, where (as Lily said) I used named boats from the thread. It didn't fit the piece to have Estelnar know random people's names (other than Althea, who would have introduced herself when they loaded the boat, I think everyone else she namedrops is perfect Monitor 'article' fodder), and "I saw a boat with an old man and a kid arguing, it had a name but I didn't write it down" didn't work for me.
hS
But I don’t think I’m writing anything with Mina.
(And I think their boat would be named the Mina, because Mina would like that.)
—Ls
Time is so much a scam, and I particularly liked the bits about DAS and the boat race
...and it certainly didn't here. I laughed at the Horoscopes closing bit and sympathised far too much with the passage of time being a scam.
I just realised "never fails to disappoint" is NOT what I meant. I liked the story hS, I just can't phrase things properly. X'D
Because I looked at it multiple times and didn't clock what you'd actually written until you said this. It's perfect. XD
hS
I liked it...uh, the horoscopes were great.
And I’m sure Mina’s miffed that they didn’t mention her in there. Carlisle probably couldn’t care less.
—Ls
... and indeed Neshomeh, you didn't name the boat, so it doesn't get a mention. :)
hS
Now I’m tempted to write Mina lecturing the Monitor’s staff. Very tempted. But I’m not quite sure how to proceed.
—Ls, who thinks that’d be funny, and is curious if hS has any idears.
I'm not sure what she's planning to lecture them about, but you can if you want.
hS
Remind me the next time you feel inclined to do another one of these and I'll contribute a picture or two to the cause!
~Lily, who has no time to fire up InDesign to do another NMM, though Nita Incog and Anon E. Maus definitely insist they're still around...