Subject: re: return!
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Posted on: 2022-07-08 14:51:42 UTC

Ha, I love the new trainees! They have so much personality, and such distinct character voices! And "Happy Bagel," oh my gosh, what an extremely Hobbit-vibed name! But I must ask: if Aj is the Xander, then is Cass the Buffy or the Willow? Or perhaps, the Anya? Also, I'm glad Sasha gets to shine in this story, since your last return story focused more on Steven and Wallis!

Okay, I never bothered to look up the surviving portions of "Rambling Band," uh: that is the single most amazing mechanical justification for a transdimensional hop I have ever read, they drove through a giant movie screen. "Rambling Band" wins at dimension hops, you could say it's . . . isekaind of amazing! sunglasses

But Laurel herself, wow, Jay and Acacia presented her far more kindly than they needed to! She is mean. Her bandmates deserve a better bassist/girlfriend. One thing I will defend the story for, though: if Laurel is wearing thick boots, and the leg of her pants was shredded anyway, Aragorn may have simply ripped the rest of the pant leg off to treat her cut, which would explain why her boots were still strapped on.

Um, remember how I list all the typos I find when I review PPC stories? Yeah, I still do that!
". . . she had lost most of the over top the badfic generated New Orleans accent. . ."
"over the top"

"The video footage on the screen went a rather grainy . . ."
You left you a little extra "a" there! eats

". . . bringing it to the attention of far more people that the Flowers would probably like."
Although this is a lovely notion, that the Original Series brought more agents that the Flowers found enjoyable to interact with, I suspect you intended a "than" there.

—doctorlit, always glad when stories get Meta : )

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