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Posted on: 2022-07-09 17:42:42 UTC
Overall, that was a nice story and I liked it. Looking forward to seeing more of your stuff again.
Having made a return to the board, it was only right that I made a return to the Classroom as well. With it being the twentieth anniversary of the PPC it seemed only fitting that I do my bit to honour that, with my return, and as such I present Agent Sasha Fontwell and the class of 2022 in a story that could only be titled PPC+20.
Overall, that was a nice story and I liked it. Looking forward to seeing more of your stuff again.
Ha, I love the new trainees! They have so much personality, and such distinct character voices! And "Happy Bagel," oh my gosh, what an extremely Hobbit-vibed name! But I must ask: if Aj is the Xander, then is Cass the Buffy or the Willow? Or perhaps, the Anya? Also, I'm glad Sasha gets to shine in this story, since your last return story focused more on Steven and Wallis!
Okay, I never bothered to look up the surviving portions of "Rambling Band," uh: that is the single most amazing mechanical justification for a transdimensional hop I have ever read, they drove through a giant movie screen. "Rambling Band" wins at dimension hops, you could say it's . . . isekaind of amazing! sunglasses
But Laurel herself, wow, Jay and Acacia presented her far more kindly than they needed to! She is mean. Her bandmates deserve a better bassist/girlfriend. One thing I will defend the story for, though: if Laurel is wearing thick boots, and the leg of her pants was shredded anyway, Aragorn may have simply ripped the rest of the pant leg off to treat her cut, which would explain why her boots were still strapped on.
Um, remember how I list all the typos I find when I review PPC stories? Yeah, I still do that!
". . . she had lost most of the over top the badfic generated New Orleans accent. . ."
"over the top"
"The video footage on the screen went a rather grainy . . ."
You left you a little extra "a" there! eats
". . . bringing it to the attention of far more people that the Flowers would probably like."
Although this is a lovely notion, that the Original Series brought more agents that the Flowers found enjoyable to interact with, I suspect you intended a "than" there.
—doctorlit, always glad when stories get Meta : )
Most importantly thanks for the typos, always appreciated so they can be eliminated as swift as possible.
In regards to Cass, the fic she was saved from had her mostly consigned to the background but she'd be closest to Willow. Her Mother was a 100% New Orleans Voodoo Queen stereotype, who hung around with AJ and the Sue (Of course the Sue being Buffy's daughter) until she seemed suddenly forgotten about half way through.
I'm hoping to use these cadets to also help answer the question of what happened to the class of 2012, which I'd had stories for but never actually got them written down. (They weren't forgotten)
I liked the “looking back at the PPC” idea, and think it really works.
It looks like you maybe could’ve used a beta, I spotted a few minor SPaG errors.
Good, but short.
—Ls
I also just woke up, so pardon me lol.
I do really like the colors differing the badfic/mission from the rest of the text. I do wonder why badfic text (if I'm reading it correctly) is green, while mission text is red. Again, I'm half-asleep, so I'm sorry if the answer is in the actual text.
It's good. I like it!
-kA, whose mind wandered back to their VR training idea with recruits and a purposefully-fed badfic for some reason.
To be perfectly honest I usually tend to differentiate the badfic text and in green, and wanted to use something different for the mission quote. Honestly I didn't put that much thought into what colour it was, although I think I went for orange first and thought it may be a bit hard to read.
I love the idea that the agents are doing the exact same ridiculous retrospective as we are. ^_^ I also admired how well you dealt with the issue of the preserved badfic cutting off before the agents show up.
hS
I must admit I was trying to work out the best way to throw in the nostalgia, given that plenty of PPC stories have since been written prior to 2002, then realised it was my own agents tenth anniversary (from graduation at least) and it would still be the 20th anniversary of the PPC being 'outed'.