Subject: re: London, Unreal
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Posted on: 2022-07-11 17:37:26 UTC

Yeah, the London setting was obvious, but I like how you're constructing this London out of geographically accurate parts from different canons. It's a really strong follow-up from Sergio's "patchwork geography," which was more focused on landmasses and biomes than an individual city. I see I'm a bit behind on my reading materials, though at least you seem to be using the television versions of Omens and Strange, which I wasn't planning on watching anyway. I'm excited to see how things unfold, in any case!

"Mr. and Mrs. Davenport," eh? Is there a rule that all WWA stories must contain that surname?

A couple typos:
The streetlamps when from burned-out bulbs to Narnia-style lanterns . . .
I think you wanted "went" there?

"Mom," Jasmine murmured, as the reached the edge of a tree-filled square . . .
"they"

Also, I'm reading one of the Earth's Children novels right now, so when you first mentioned the horse, my brain was primed to imagine it as a Przewalski-esque primitive horse, but I suppose that's probably not the sort of horse you were imagining in London . . . Heh, okay. Checking Wikipedia, the British Isles saw horses at least as far back as 700,000 BC, while Earth's Children is set in roughly 28,000 BC. So while a primitive horse could appear in the Unraveled London, it would see humans as predators, and probably wouldn't hang out near humans at a bookshop's door. Still, I hope the horsie friend finds their caretakers, or gets taken in by new ones! Horsie friend seems lonely . . .

Oh, and I don't remember if I commented on "A Study in Carnë" while you were posting it, but I definitely read it, and it was quite good!

—doctorlit should probably be researching candidates to vote on right now, but reading and reviewing never ceases!

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