Subject: Mission Release!
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Posted on: 2022-09-21 17:12:48 UTC
Behold Thalia and Doom’s first ever mission in its much better glory! Link Text
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Mission Release! by
on 2022-09-21 17:12:48 UTC
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re: mission . . . partially . . . by
on 2022-09-23 12:52:15 UTC
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So, I'm actually skipping the . . . mission part of the this mission, because I haven't started Redwall yet, and I don't want any spoilers. Sorry?
But I did read the intro section, and liked it! Compared to some of your other stories, the dialogue between Thalia and Doom flows very well, with Thalia's hilarious internal thought patterns still present, but not completely overwhelming the narration, and giving Doom more room to breathe and act. Well done!
—doctorlit will totally start Redwall eventually, he only needs to collect six more and he'll have them all!
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Thanks! by
on 2022-09-23 19:46:09 UTC
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To be honest, there isn’t much spoilers for Redwall in there. Only about four canon characters and one canon location are mentioned and… they really don’t have much of a part. It revolves around Röźa Sue and her two friends.
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Review and typos. by
on 2022-09-21 18:31:14 UTC
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Erm, in your post, I think you mean "its much better glory".
I liked the mission. Thalia and Doom's personalities really shine.
"The PPC is the property of the amazing Jay and Acacia; Redwall belongs to Brian Jacques mayherestinpeace; and the badfic and the agents."
What about the badfic and agents? I think you left something out of the disclaimer.
“Ok!”
Perhaps I'm just being nitpicky here, but that should be either "okay" or "OK".
--Ls
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Ah yes, automatic autocorrect is a pain by
on 2022-09-21 20:21:45 UTC
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But thanks! I really enjoyed rewriting this one!
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Now I’m curious... by
on 2022-09-21 20:28:22 UTC
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...if the badfic is yours, why did the Sue have a Polish name? Any particular reason?
—Ls, being curious
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Uh… ever read Rose Under Fire? by
on 2022-09-21 20:34:36 UTC
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I stole the name from one of the main characters who I thought was a total badnff (she was)… and then proceeded to write that monstrosity in her honor. As for Zofia, I had a friend called Sophie around the same time so I Polishfied it.
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Huh. That’s interesting. Never read it. (nm) by
on 2022-09-21 21:12:42 UTC
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