re: mission . . . partially . . . by
doctorlit
on 2022-09-23 12:52:15 UTC
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So, I'm actually skipping the . . . mission part of the this mission, because I haven't started Redwall yet, and I don't want any spoilers. Sorry?
But I did read the intro section, and liked it! Compared to some of your other stories, the dialogue between Thalia and Doom flows very well, with Thalia's hilarious internal thought patterns still present, but not completely overwhelming the narration, and giving Doom more room to breathe and act. Well done!
—doctorlit will totally start Redwall eventually, he only needs to collect six more and he'll have them all!
Review and typos. by
Linstar
on 2022-09-21 18:31:14 UTC
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Erm, in your post, I think you mean "its much better glory".
I liked the mission. Thalia and Doom's personalities really shine.
"The PPC is the property of the amazing Jay and Acacia; Redwall belongs to Brian Jacques mayherestinpeace; and the badfic and the agents."
What about the badfic and agents? I think you left something out of the disclaimer.
“Ok!”
Perhaps I'm just being nitpicky here, but that should be either "okay" or "OK".
--Ls