Subject: [Spoilers] Slightly emotionally heavy Demonly Kings interlude,
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Posted on: 2023-01-23 07:06:23 UTC
Following up from this mission, at last 'Guya is discovered, and characters get slapped around a lot.
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[Spoilers] Slightly emotionally heavy Demonly Kings interlude, by
on 2023-01-23 07:06:23 UTC
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re: emotionally heavy interlude by
on 2023-01-23 16:59:05 UTC
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Kind of hate the way this starts, with Urato and Inasuke not even giving Kaguya a chance to explain anything before ripping into him. I guess I'm just more in tune with words than emotions, but it feels wild to me that they wouldn't check in on him first and discuss what happened after.
I did, however, enjoy the part where Kaguya and Momoka finally talked about their relationship with each other. I'm hoping to see a more balanced power dynamic between them moving forward, but even if I don't get that, I'm glad Kaguya at least recognizes Momoka's feelings better now.
A couple grammar errors:
"Once RC 381's screen door slid close behind the group . . ."
"slid closed "". . . who was still having his back turned to her."
Okay, I'm being a little nitpicky here, but it's less clunky to say, "still had his back turned"—doctorlit kinda wishes Urato had gotten slapped too; he is the most slappable of the group
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Thanks for the comment, and re: 'Guya and Momo's dynamic by
on 2023-01-23 23:25:02 UTC
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As I said in a previous thread, I love samurai-like loyalty and devotion (regardless of the genders of the characters portrayed), hence the Oda Nobunaga-Mori Ranmaru reference, but without abuse connotations. In fact, I've seen, and many of my ships are, master-servant duos who canonically have healthy relationships, so I want to recreate that dynamic with RC 381 as well.