Subject: I'm aware, I was just shortening the name for simplicity/speed.
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Posted on: 2023-06-16 02:44:56 UTC
Had to finish the comment before breakfast ended; I have a very busy week/month and need to read and review whenever I can.
And I think you'll find that my comment makes perfect sense when referring to the continuum or the school . . .
—doctorlit has an inkling the zoo isn't planning on increasing keeper staff numbers any time soon
After Helena and Sheen introduced Fáelán to their home 'verse, what will follow up next? Fáelán's introducing them to his home 'verse, of course.
I’m finding myself on both sides of the Sheen vs Fáelán debate. On the one hand, Sheen has a point; protecting canon is the agents’ jobs, so they have some responsibility to learn about the canons. But I also like Fáelán’s point, that he literally lived at Night Raven, and joined the PPC to get away from it. For him, that world is more defined by his own lived experience than by the events depicted in Twisted Wonderland. (Plus, if I found myself isekai’d into like, Narnia or wherever, and discovered that some author there had published “fiction” about my real world, I wouldn’t be particularly keen on reading it. I have REAL CENTAURS to talk to!) Meanwhile, Helena really has the healthiest outlook out of the three: learn new things, enjoy the sights, get some paint!
I would generally caution against establishing recruitment limits on a canon, since it potentially limits the options of future writers. I know Twisted Wonderland is a small fandom that no other boarder is currently interacting with, but it still feels a tad disrespectful. I know you wrote Fáelán as though he existed previously in canon, but of course, he didn’t really, and his recruitment didn’t remove anyone from Night Raven.
—doctorlit almost wants to play Twisted Wonderland, but knows he doesn’t have the time
Night Raven College is the name of the school. It's the only location named that.
Had to finish the comment before breakfast ended; I have a very busy week/month and need to read and review whenever I can.
And I think you'll find that my comment makes perfect sense when referring to the continuum or the school . . .
—doctorlit has an inkling the zoo isn't planning on increasing keeper staff numbers any time soon
It's based on "feeding Sues to certain monsters" limits established elsewhere. Now that I thought about it, your argument makes sense; should I retcon the recruitment limit out?
I like the conflict you were able to work in. I really felt for Faelan (sorry for the lack of diacritics) there. And Sheen is still pretty insufferable.
How long will it be before you run out of TW badfics, I wonder?
Typos:
Is "⚔️Welcome to the villains world⚔️" from the badfic?
"Yep, now I understand why those people's dialogues are slightly better worded than everything else, brung and quite aside,"
What's wrong with "quite"? Is it a typo?
-Ls
In context, it's supposed to be "quiet".
For a new and rising fandom? Ha, you wish.
Yes, for some reason using emoji and other types of special characters in fic or chapter titles, up to and including strings of "lucky charms" characters, is rather common in Wattpad badfics.
You could tweak the dialog to indicate that it was supposed to be "quiet", it'd be a bit clearer.
Wattpad sure is an interesting place...
-Ls