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Posted on: 2023-11-11 02:23:10 UTC
I look for ward to the next part.
However, one quibble: "The only sound the environment made was an annoying, squeaky first-person narration; the only moving creature was King Trident the trident-wielding, chewing-gum-wielding baby moray eel."
Seems a bit redundant to use wielding twice there.
--Ls should write a mission
As the group seeks help from the tengu scientist who gave Kaguya the mysterious pill, revelations are made.
Heh. I like how this story arc is shaping up, it’s pretty entertaining!
As the Cotton Roses Bloom part 2
I love how you’ve characterized Oshimo; she feels so alien, the way she recognizes that she created a problem, but doesn’t seem to feel any remorse or sympathy over it, just expects the agents to get out and deal with it on their own. She even comes off as a little spooky! I like it. The pill’s effect playing with the Japanese double meaning on “color” is hilarious, as well!
Of Seaside Castles and Red Breams part 1
You definitely found a fic with some stellar typos, there! I especially love “King Trident.” It made me picture the trident itself just sitting on Triton’s throne, with his crown hanging off one of the tines. But much funnier than the fic is your ingredient list! I was expecting things like plants and minerals and animal hair, so when Urato finally read out all that abstract stuff, I was grinning. The agents certainly are in for a struggle, aren’t they? I’m racking my brains on how to “solve” some of them . . . Let’s see, one of the jack-o’-lanterns from the Halloween Tree could qualify as a “seed of time,” since they only “bloom” around Halloween, and the story that’s named for it involves time travel. For “a fragment of the night,” the Kingdom Hearts games have a set of synthesis items named ”writhing” and ”twilight” that contain “darkness” and “twilight” respectively; they could be said to be physical fragments of night! And then, “cloth of fleetingness” could be all kinds of equipment from different fantasy settings or mythologies . . . or just Cross Trekkers. And I’ve got nothing for “perfume of daylight.” I guess just open a jar while the sun is up, then close the jar?
Oh, and you taught me a new word, bream! Which is a little embarrassing, but hey, I don’t work on the aquarium side!
—doctorlit wonders if it would be funny or traumatic for Akira to be sorted into Octavinelle dorm
Given their distinct biological quality, how would one work as a Flower in HQ?
. . . the Flower version's mood could change over time? HQ doesn't have days in the traditional sense, of course, so just . . . over time? >.>
—doctorlit travels twenty-four hours forward in time, each and every day.
Spoilers: she doesn't go to NRC. Which is a new one, I guess.
In which the search for antidote ingredients begins, and strange vocabulary choices lead to a race track appearing out of nowhere.
I look for ward to the next part.
However, one quibble: "The only sound the environment made was an annoying, squeaky first-person narration; the only moving creature was King Trident the trident-wielding, chewing-gum-wielding baby moray eel."
Seems a bit redundant to use wielding twice there.
--Ls should write a mission
and thanks for reading 😁