Subject: Have read!
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Posted on: 2024-02-02 01:54:51 UTC
Enjoyed. It was pretty short, and funny.
--Ls
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New month, new mission by
on 2024-02-01 15:54:59 UTC
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The colour swap arc continues with the Four Demonly Kings' search for the second antidote ingredient in the Tinker Bell continuum. This is not actually one of my best works, to be honest; the focus in this entry is neither the ingredient hunt nor the mission itself. Rather, the main goal is to provide some more information on the vacation that the group is working towards.
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re: mission by
on 2024-02-06 01:27:43 UTC
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Oh wow, another ingredient already! And Urato fainting from too much flower scent is hilarious—although both that and the ingredient collection would have been more fun to read in the moment, rather than have it described afterwards. Still, watching Kaguya have to haul Urato around to the point of running out of pixie dust is funny, and they had excellent timing in terms of charging the Suvians!
Hm. The vacation is specifically Urato’s and Inasuke’s idea, and Inasuke got evasive when Momoka suggested vacationing in Pixie Hollow. I take it Urato and Inasuke have a particular destination in mind, for a particular reason? Interesting . . .
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. . . from a higher branch, said a short boy fairy of wavy black hair.
I think that will read more smoothly if the two phrases are reversed, so that the dialogue tag is next to the dialogue, and the location description follows.—doctorlit, mid-shave
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Have read! by
on 2024-02-02 01:54:51 UTC
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Enjoyed. It was pretty short, and funny.
--Ls