Subject: re: mission
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Posted on: 2024-02-06 01:27:43 UTC

Oh wow, another ingredient already! And Urato fainting from too much flower scent is hilarious—although both that and the ingredient collection would have been more fun to read in the moment, rather than have it described afterwards. Still, watching Kaguya have to haul Urato around to the point of running out of pixie dust is funny, and they had excellent timing in terms of charging the Suvians!

Hm. The vacation is specifically Urato’s and Inasuke’s idea, and Inasuke got evasive when Momoka suggested vacationing in Pixie Hollow. I take it Urato and Inasuke have a particular destination in mind, for a particular reason? Interesting . . .

One comment on the line:
. . . from a higher branch, said a short boy fairy of wavy black hair.
I think that will read more smoothly if the two phrases are reversed, so that the dialogue tag is next to the dialogue, and the location description follows.

—doctorlit, mid-shave

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