Subject: I intend to give the character some serious moments
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Posted on: 2024-10-31 12:41:04 UTC
They'll have maybe one or two moments of serious scheming and an understandable character motivation, but outside of that, they won't make a serious impact.
Next up in the Arare arc, get ready for a PotC mission, in which Arare goes on a mission with Urato into a place too hot for his comfort.
I have a question though: I feel that my scenery descriptions are getting rusty, so did I do a good description job in this story? I also tend to start missions in medias res, so do you find it confusing?
-Yuki, who's just remembered that ura 浦 means "bay" or "inlet", the agent is named after Urashimatarō, and his full name essentially means "bay person on a mountain of wealth", which is oddly fitting for the pirate theme.
I plan to write a character who's genuinely deceitful, self-serving and up to no good. However, would a genuinely villainous character (not an anti-villain like Arare) work as a PPC character without going against its spirit? The character:
Is an evil business owner-type character, but doesn't aim for things like changing PPC leadership and structure or anything of the sort. They literally just want money.
Doesn't commit truly heinous acts like killing or abuse, and doesn't pose a massive, serious threat level like the Mysterious Somebody (and I'm aware catastrophic stories of that type are no longer allowed). They aren't the PPC Big Bad or anything, they're just a bad guy chilling among the PPC populace.
Has most of their evil antics played for laughs.
The PPC has never been averse to having evil agents, per se, as long as they don't cause so much trouble they interfere with the Duty. Honestly, what you describe is par for the average American CEO. >.> And they won't have much luck in the PPC, which is more of a barter economy anyway since most agents aren't even paid money. It would do my heart good to see someone like that fail comically at every turn.
~Neshomeh
An evil agent that consistently fails would definitely be funny, as long as you're not overly serious about it.
--Ls
They'll have maybe one or two moments of serious scheming and an understandable character motivation, but outside of that, they won't make a serious impact.
But I would advise minimizing the narrative taking it seriously.
--Ls
In preparation for an upcoming arc, I'd like to place an adoption request for Ceil the Continuity Cat. I'm also claiming two minis discovered in my own spin-off: strawberry land the mini-Gold Sand Dollar and seimeis the mini-daruma.
Sorry for the delayed review; I’ve had a very busy couple of weeks!
Hey, been a while since Pirates of the Caribbean got a PPC mission! I’m amused by Usuasagi’s disguise, and his reaction to the equatorial climate. checks Wikipedia I mean, the . . . somewhat in the rough vicinity of near the equator climate.
Usuasagi and Urato make for an interesting pair, in regards to the former learning about fear. Urato is full of bluster and confidence, but despite his statement that he isn’t afraid of anything, he did let slip what he actually fears: his friends getting hurt, if he can’t protect them. The fear doesn’t come from a Suvian existing in a vacuum, but from the threat they pose to others, to loved ones. I just hope this isn’t giving Usuasagi any ideas about threatening any agents to instill fear in their partners . . .
Ah, more information about the Seven Wonders of PPC HQ! Looks like they occupy a nice assortment of infrastructure departments. I just hope Urato isn’t on to something with his “evil Super Sentai” observation. Are they going to gain some power from filling out the seven? Also, I wonder what department Usuasagi is looking to fill in HQ, since it seemed to me he was originally wanting to return to Japan and instill fear?
—doctorlit yar har something something buried treasure joke
His first name is Arare though 🤣
P.S: Fun fact: in the Japanese dub of the PotC movies, the Commodore and the Governor are addressed by their direct subordinates as 閣下 (kakka, "Your Excellency", "Your Honour").
-Yuki, who now also remembers that Urato's last name is a reference to The Golden Demon, a novel series explicitly warning about unchecked greed (it ain't called "the golden demon" for nothing). Also, "Reeking of Rosewater" sounds like a good name for a rock band.
Hah, I liked how little attention Arare paid to the fic. The contrast between his aloofness and Urato's irritation was funny. I am curious to hear more about these "Seven Wonders" Arare is talking about, and his questioning of Urato's lack of fear.
I do think you did a pretty good job with the description at the beginning, though I think you could have used a little more of it throughout the mission. I think it was a good use of in media res, but I would also like to see some missions with more of an intro.
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I did notice a typo in the line:
"Man, I wish I can mission with ya more often. Ya make a good personal air conditioner,"
I assume you meant to use "could" there?
--Ls
While I have no plans to reveal all of them, I will reveal 2 more outside of Oshimo.