It's good, but it feels a bit off somehow. I think it's that it's a bit hollow.
The emotions feel underplayed. If I found a snake in my bed, I would shriek, but it's brushed off very quickly. I know that some people react to different situations, but it doesn't seem realistic.
Also, I don't understand Saline. The whole thing about her being tough, but really caring about her partner feels like it came out of no where. It could just be me missing some crucial bits like I have been lately, and if it is, please tell me.
Other than that though, good work!

Yay! We've got a card shop now! Now I have somewhere to send [unnamed future agent] for his Magic cards!

I'm curious about a couple of things. What misspelling caused Priyala's anemia? Apologies if it was already mentioned in another piece and I've forgotten.

Also, what blueprint is Saline looking at in the end? Is it for Medical, or some building in a particular canon? Why is she studying it?