Subject: Re: Interlude
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Posted on: 2012-01-24 02:31:00 UTC

I very muchly like Hannibal! His dialogue is tons of fun to read aloud, and he can be both joking and serious. I wouldn't mind reading some "flashback" missions of him and Kay. They kept the tone of this piece fairly upbeat, and I didn't find it very dark at all.

Irmish? Irmish? What an awful-sounding name, even for a Yeerk. (No offense.)

Some mistakes I caught!
"The voice was familiar. He had heard it before, not to long ago."

"He thought about what Hannival had said harder about things than he had been previously."

"Hannibal watched the wheel’s turn in Orken’s head. When the look of confusion was slowly replaced by a growing anger, the agent know that Orken had had his epiphany."

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