Subject: Interesting read.
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Posted on: 2012-01-23 11:37:00 UTC
It's a bit darker than the usual PPC stuff, but not grimdark, so that works.
I kinda like the whole "we have dracon beams!"
Also, Hannibal and Kay sound like fun people... what else is there about Kay?
In which Orken 7861 is recruited by agents of the Protectors of the Plot Continuum.
Link is here
Not really a funny interlude. It's exactly what it says it is: an origin story for Orken. Unfortunately, the badfic he was recruited from (something I wrote by hand when I was twelve) has been lost to the depths of time. The one "badfic quote" comes from a spelling mistake I used to make a lot, and the bits of the plot I mention are true to what I remember. Also, the thing about the dracon beams is not narrative convenience to explain how Orken acquired stuff in Headquarters; I really did have an obsession with the damn things when I wrote the badfic in question.
Also, this is possibly, the introduction of a new agent pair, because I really like the way that they play off of each other. Hannibal, of course, has gotten mentions in previous stuff I've written, but Kay is new.
I very muchly like Hannibal! His dialogue is tons of fun to read aloud, and he can be both joking and serious. I wouldn't mind reading some "flashback" missions of him and Kay. They kept the tone of this piece fairly upbeat, and I didn't find it very dark at all.
Irmish? Irmish? What an awful-sounding name, even for a Yeerk. (No offense.)
Some mistakes I caught!
"The voice was familiar. He had heard it before, not to long ago."
"He thought about what Hannival had said harder about things than he had been previously."
"Hannibal watched the wheel’s turn in Orken’s head. When the look of confusion was slowly replaced by a growing anger, the agent know that Orken had had his epiphany."
Any Hannibal/Kay missions would not necessarily have to be flashbacks. Hannibal is still an active agent, despite the unfortunate encounter he had with Thomas and plutonium.
Maybe we'll have a flashback to that incident sometime, too?
Trust me, if I find a fic with plutonium in it, I'm going to do that. But that might not ever happen, so...
And of course Hannibal is fine other than being bald; one thing I remember from an episode of Star Trek TOS is that they have a really effective anti-radiation drug; theoretically that means medical has it. Either that, or they have something else. We can therefore assume that there will be no depressing stories in the future about Hannibal having cancer.
Also, I find it kind of awesome that you read some of the dialog in this out loud, and I forgot to say so in the last post... man, I'm scatterbrained tonight.
when no one is at home. Which is rarely, but I got lucky tonight.
To be completely honest, I don't remember what the original Yeerk!Stus name was; I actually think it may have started with an O. (Not Orken, if you were wondering. That I know for sure.) However, I'm pretty sure there was an "m" in it somewhere, and yeah, I think it was horrible. Maybe. What's always stuck with me was not the name, but the plan. Dear god, why did I think that was a good plan? Granted, it actually has amusing similarities to the Fenian invasion of Canada, but that was also a terrible plan. That, and the sidekick accountant who stole millions of dollars with dummy corporations and fake stock; a la Edriss in Visser.
Thanks for catching those mistakes; they have been fixed.
It's a bit darker than the usual PPC stuff, but not grimdark, so that works.
I kinda like the whole "we have dracon beams!"
Also, Hannibal and Kay sound like fun people... what else is there about Kay?
...was about the extent of the plan. Well, that, and some unhosted yeerks in a portable pool that had somehow been overlooked. (Irmish was one of them.) Yeah, it was a terrible plan.
Kay? Well, she comes from the Inheritence verse. You know, that series we're always making fun of for being extra purple, having a Gary Stu protagonist, and ripping off star wars. She's a magic user, using the rules of that verse. She's above average in strength (the fact she can cast spells without speaking implies that); she absolutely loves television, and she really likes loot. She also isn't that bloodthirsty; more impatient, which plays off of Hannibal's more collected, professional and generally more organized approach to things.
Hannibal... well, if you read the interlude, you have a pretty good idea bout who he is. The only relevant detail not in this story which you likely already know if you follow my spinoff at all is that he is now completely bald thanks to Thomas' bringing plutonium back from a mission. This is something that, understandably, really pissed off Orken.(Which is why it's referenced in at least half of my missions.) Hannibal and Thomas have not spoken since, and Thomas has been actively avoiding him; so exactly how he feels about Thomas is unknown. I do plan on having them meet up eventually, and Orken... well, I'll talk more about their relationship (which I promise, is not romantic, so don't get any ideas) in future interludes, maybe.
Yeah... that's probably more than you needed or wanted to know about Hannibal, but it helped me to write all that out, so feel free to not read that section. :p