Subject: Re: Mission
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Posted on: 2012-01-12 02:57:00 UTC
I just had to say, the two assassinations in this mission are probably my favorite ever! (As in, funniest.)
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NEW MISSION: Dragon Quest 8, 'The Missing Heir' by
on 2012-01-10 19:59:00 UTC
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This is a collaboration between Aster Corbett and Ray Chell, somewhat more goofy, and humorous and light-hearted in the face of a lot of srs bsns.
"After screwing up yet again, Aster Corbett guides a new transfer to the DMS through a story containing a terrible trajeck backstory, unexplained mood swings, and a total disregard of Dragon Quest humor."
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Excellent! by
on 2012-01-13 19:35:00 UTC
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This is definently a lot more light hearted then usual for missions, and my mental image is pretty cartoony. A very funny and amusing mission through and through.
My favorite part has to be... Hmm. Probably the CAD talking HK-47! Yeah, great idea using that, he was my favorite character! ^___^ Either that or the execution method, having a faulty sense of humor is something I'd never have thought of. Good idea! -
Re: Excellent! by
on 2012-01-13 19:44:00 UTC
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Oh yeah! That CAD was good. I liked its level of sentience and smart aleck-iness. And the execution was definitely unique. It should go on the list of execution methods.
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Pull the LEVER!! by
on 2012-01-13 18:31:00 UTC
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I loved that gag. It was one of my favorite parts of The Emperor's New Groove.
I don't know the Dragon Age canon at all, but that Sue was patently awful. Good kill.
I thought the interaction between the agents at the very end was a bit odd, with the sudden prostate begging, but overall the interactions were good. It kept the mission moving along nicely and made some nice jokes with the fic. -
THE OTHER LEVER! *falls into pit* by
on 2012-01-13 19:30:00 UTC
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I abused that gag many, many times in a crossover I wrote with my friends several years ago. In fact, we added the characters from the movie only to use the gag.
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I've read the fic... by
on 2012-01-12 06:18:00 UTC
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And I find it amusing. The Sue's trajeck past was not convincing the agents after her over-the-top show of her Suelike characteristics.
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Re: Mission by
on 2012-01-12 02:57:00 UTC
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I just had to say, the two assassinations in this mission are probably my favorite ever! (As in, funniest.)
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*equips proofreading hat* by
on 2012-01-11 04:31:00 UTC
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I noticed a few minor issues in the mission. First,
"Marcello seemed to be in a ‘good mood’ and thought she was looking ‘exceptionally pretty.’ he bHgan to smile, and there was a light in his green eyes as he asked her if Angelo was bothering her earlier, although he was there to witness it."
The underlined part looks to be missing a sentence seperator and contains a typo. Short after that
"The papers made a special effort to saturate every square foot of the interior's volume"
Volume does not work with square feet. Use a different expression to show that they are filling up the whole room.
Other than that, the mission was rather well done. -
Whoop! by
on 2012-01-11 04:53:00 UTC
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Some stuff always slips through. Even with two betas. Will get on this right away, but I'm still happy you enjoyed it. :)
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I don't know Dragon Quest... by
on 2012-01-10 21:06:00 UTC
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...but I knew that Sue was really bad from the moment she started being all "I don't want your sympathy, you idiots!" That is a common trait with trajeck Sues indeed.
Really fun mission, you two. :D -
Favorite moment. by
on 2012-01-12 10:29:00 UTC
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I find it amusing how the Sue was all like "I'm telling my backstory, so DON'T INTERRUPT ME!"
That was when all rest of possible believability was lost.